Talk:The Invincible Iron Man (video game)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 05:19, 7 June 2022 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this! If I haven't reviewed this by Saturday please shoot me a reminder! Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 05:19, 7 June 2022 (UTC)

Pinging @Bluecrystal004: per request Cat's Tuxedo (talk) 15:49, 12 June 2022 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay, started a new job last week and overestimated the time I'd be able to commit to this. I have the next few days off so I should have my thoughts here within the next couple days. Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 17:30, 13 June 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copyright

• Fair-use rationales are good.
• Earwig returns nothing major, but some stuff that I think should be re/paraphrased (see below in red)

Infobox

• Add caption for cover art

Lead

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Gameplay

• Special power orbs located in various areas allow Iron Man to unleash a massive chest-mounted cannon or to detonate a bomb that clears the entire screen of enemies. - This is pretty much the exact wording the source uses, so I would rephrase the second part of the sentence

Plot

• in which the former defeats easily in a battle. - "in which" -> "who" or rephrase the whole thing a bit more clearly
• concocted the entire scenario - phrase this some other way, such as "orchestrated the theft" or something

Development and release

• with Torus' Kevin McIntosh - a bit picky but "Torus'" -> "Torus's"
• It is the first handheld video game to feature Iron Man as a playable character. - recommend moving this to the end of the section

Reception

• My main problem with this section is there are too many direct quotations. All the ones listed below should be paraphrased in my opinion
• "the best side-scrolling shoot-'em-up for Game Boy Advance since Turok: Evolution" - could just remove this, I don't know that it needs to be mentioned
• "one of the better examples of how a comic book should be transformed into a video game"
• "a throwback to the days of the Genesis and Super NES where action platformers featuring licensed characters were pretty much a dime a dozen"
• with little distinguishing features. - "little" -> "few"
• "The Invincible Iron Man is one of the wimpiest game heroes we've encountered and deserves to be locked away in this rather limp platformer-with-guns"
• "Metroid and countless other games mastered eight-directional shooting a decade ago, this is ridiculous"

References

• Spotchecked all citations since there's not many, all claims are sourced
• All sources reliable

@Cat's Tuxedo: Again, sorry for the delay. Here are my thoughts, but the article is in good shape overall. Putting  On hold to await fixes/responses. Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 01:26, 15 June 2022 (UTC)

@Bluecrystal004: No prob. All points have been addressed. Cat's Tuxedo (talk) 02:28, 15 June 2022 (UTC)

@Cat's Tuxedo Looks good, thanks for your work on this article! Passing now Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 03:12, 16 June 2022 (UTC)