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Chris Redfield

Featured article candidates/Chris Redfield/archive1

Nominator(s): Boneless Pizza! (talk) and StarScream1007 13:43, 18 December 2024 (UTC) (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a main character from the Resident Evil game and film series; who is known for punching a boulder at the active volcano in video games.

After Aoba47, Crisco, and Shapeyness (from their talk page) peer reviewed the article I feel like the article has improved a lot. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 13:43, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Media review and support from Crisco

File:Chris Redfield RE8.png - Source is a bare URL, which is subject to linkrot. A bit more detail is necessary.
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:40, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
File:Chris Redfield.png - Same as above. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 20:34, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:40, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose comments:

Video game magazines have been polarized in their critiques of the character, - Pretty sure it's not just magazines. Journalism is not synonymous with magazine.
Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Some critics have referred to a scene of Chris punching a boulder in Resident Evil 5 (2009) as one of the most memorable within the Resident Evil series, which was also subjected to internet memes. - "Which was ..." is a dangling modifier and could be read as "the series was also subjected to internet memes", which is true but not what you intended here.
Replaced to "Which is" 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Rearranged like this — Chris Woodrich (talk) 22:42, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Chris joined the special operations unit of the Special Tactics and Rescue Service (S.T.A.R.S.). - Isn't S.T.A.R.S. the spec-ops unit of the RPD? I'd rephrase this as "Chris joined the Special Tactics and Rescue Service (S.T.A.R.S.), a special operations unit of the Raccoon Police Department.
Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Character designer Tsutomu Kawade noted that Chris' signature was his powerful arms, and they were aware of that. His concept color is green, and Kawade wanted it to be visible, so they designed his attire in blue-tinted green. - These sentences are clunky. Perhaps something like "Character designer Tsutomu Kawade noted that the team was aware of Chris' powerful arms being his most distinctive feature. Their design thus accentuated his arms, with attire in blue-tinted green that continued his concept color."?
Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
photo realistic depiction - isn't photorealistic one word?
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
According to the director of Resident Evil Village, Kento Kinoshita, the production team initially had a different plan for the game's downloadable content (DLC); Kinoshita said that the crew initially preferred a DLC with Rose Winters as the main character, rather than with Chris rejoining the action. - This doesn't really segue with the rest of the paragraph. Also, it doesn't really communicate that a Chris-based DLC was initially discussed.
I guess it doesn't habe enough detail, so I ended uo removing it. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
a bio-terror attack - Bioterrorism is unhyphenated above
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You use "Rose Winters" above but "Rosemary" below
Removed 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
He also makes a cameo appearance in Fortnite Battle Royale (2017),[68] Nintendo crossover video game Super Smash Bros. Ultimate (2018) as one of the 'Spirit' power-ups,[69] Dead by Daylight (2016) and Tom Clancy's The Division 2 (2019) as an alternate skin,[70][71] State of Survival (2019),[72] digital collectible card game Teppen (2019),[73] Dead Rising Deluxe Remaster (2024) as an outfit for Frank West,[74] and a robot dressed as Chris makes a cameo reference in Astro's Playroom (2020) and Astro Bot (2024).[75][76] - Might be worth splitting
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
particularly since his more muscular appearance in Resident Evil 5. - particularly since his more muscular appearance debuted in Resident Evil 5.
Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Internet - Capitalized or not?
Maybe not, replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:41, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
videogames - With a space, I should think? —
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:00, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Chris Woodrich (talk) 20:58, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Chris Woodrich. I've addressed everything. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:40, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, BP. Looks good, and happy to support. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 22:43, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Many thanks to the review! 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 22:44, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Aoba47

I would remove the second comma in this sentence: (Several actors have portrayed Chris, including Wentworth Miller and Robbie Amell, in the live-action Resident Evil films.) It does change the meaning. With the second comma, it is saying that several actors have played Chris in the live-action films with Miller and Amell as just two examples. Without that comma, it is saying that several actors have played this character, including these two live-action instances. I'd go for the meaning without the comma.
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 21:40, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
For this part, (with particular focus on the frequent modifications to his design and inconsistent appearance), I do not think that "particular" is necessary as that is already assumed with the word "focused". The final bit seems a bit repetitious to me as it is saying the character is receiving criticism for his design being frequently changed and then saying again that his appearance is inconsistent. Maybe something along the lines of (on the frequent modifications and inconsistency in his design)?
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 21:40, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I do not think that "subjected" works in this context, (which is subjected to internet memes), as I always perceive the word as having a more negative connotation. I would use a different word choice here.
Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 21:40, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
For this part, (modeler Yosuke Yamagata), would it be helpful to have a link for modeler?
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 21:40, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I would more directly attribute the following quote, "pretty dramatic". I believe that this is said by Jun Takeuchi based on context, but since this quote comes in for a new sentence, I think it would be good to clarify who is saying this quote.
Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 21:40, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I would avoid using the following sentence construction, (with X verb-ing), when possible as it is something often discouraged on the FAC level. An example of this is, (with the two leading a group to destroy Umbrella's only remaining research facility), as well as this, (with fans using it to demonstrate Chris' masculinity).
I believe this is done. I found three instances, but please let us know if I missed anything. -- StarScream1007 ►Talk 00:46, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I would be consistent with using title case for the citation titles. I know that this is a pain, and I was honestly only made aware of it somewhat recently, but it does seem like another common point made in FACs.
This should be done as well. Please let me know if I missed something or if any the titles still need adjustment. -- StarScream1007 ►Talk 01:29, 20 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I hope that these comments are helpful. I believe that should be everything, but I will read through the article a few more times just to make sure that I have not missed anything. I am always happy to see more fictional characters in the FAC space. Great work as always with that. Best of luck with the FAC, and I hope you are having a great week so far! Aoba47 (talk) 19:09, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]