Talk:Sihayo kaXongo/GA1

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Reviewer: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 02:20, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Overview

Hi Dumelow, I will take this on as part of Wikipedia:WikiProject Good articles/GAN Backlog Drives/January 2022. I'll make a start now but I don't think I'll have the time to complete the review today. Mujinga (talk) 02:20, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

• An interesting read, I've made some comments and put them below. I'll put the article on hold. Mujinga (talk) 10:29, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for the review Mujinga, I'll start working through your comments and will try to address them all today - Dumelow (talk) 11:01, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi Mujinga, I've think I've acted on everything now. Many thanks - Dumelow (talk) 13:44, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Nice one thanks for the fast answers, this is now a good article. I've taken the liberty of adding alts to the pix per MOS:ALT and a couple of wikilinks on one caption, please revert/alter as you wish. I enjoyed reading the article and collaborating with you on it. All the best for 2022! Mujinga (talk) 22:48, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Pictures

• Licenses ok, and pix relevant
• "An 1879 map of Zululand. Sihayo's territory (labelled uSirayo) is shown at the southern end of the western border with the Transvaal (the straight blue line), set out by Sihayo and Pretorius." could add some wikilinks here

Linked Zululand, the Transvaal and Pretorius

• "Cetshwayo, photographed in 1875" - could add a wikilink

Linked Cetshwayo

• "The crossing of the Buffalo at Rorke's Drift" - could add wikilinks and can you rephrase so it doesn't sound like buffalo are crossing the river?

Added "river"

• "A depiction of Chelmsford observing the action at Sihayo's Kraal" - could wikilink chelmsford

Linked Chelmsford

Copyvio check

• All good with earwig

Lead

• "In some contemporary British documents he is referred to as Sirhayo or Sirayo." could copy the sentence below and then the ref is in the body not the lead

Good point, done

• " iNdabakawombe iButho (social age group and regiment)" is a bit hard to parse; so it's a regiment formed out of people the same age?

Yes, a bit hard to describe. The iButho (plural amaButho) was the basis for Zulu society at this time. The men of a similar age were banded together into an iButho. These varied in size depending on the age range the king selected and the demographics of the kingdom but could be anywhere between a few hundred and several thousand men strong. It served as a means of economic (the amaButho could be directed to carry out labour for the state) and social control (it served to bind their loyalties to the king rather than their region and were under strict control of the king, including having no freedom to marry until directed to do so) but also functioned as a regiment in times of war. I am not sure how best to phrase this in the lead as I don't want to go into too much detail.

• "became one of the casus belli of" suggest "became a casus belli of" because it works better singular

Done

• "in the first action of the war" prob true but not referenced or mentioned below

It was, but not important, removed

• "The Zulu kingdom was broken up after the war and Sihayo lost his land, he continued to support Cetshwayo who was permitted to return" suggest breaking the sentence with a semi-colon or even deleting the second half

Yep, just deleted the last part

Early life

• Link Zulu?

Linked to Zulu people

• Link kraal

Linked

• "to mark the kingdom's western border" suggest "to delineate the kingdom's western border" or similar, because there's a mark in the next sentence as well

Agreed and done

1878 border incident

• "attending Cetshwayo" - attending the court of Cetshwayo?

Agreed and done

• "turned over for justice in Natal" - "turned over to justice in Natal"?

Changed to "be handed over to face justice in Natal", if that's OK?

Great! Mujinga (talk) 22:39, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

• " his standing as king as Sihayo was his" - " his standing as king since Sihayo was his"?

Agreed and done

Anglo-Zulu War

• "and a large herd of these were" suggest "and a large herd were"

Agreed and done

Post-war

• "chief Mnyamana kaNgqengelele" what's the hierarchy with Sihayo here? are they both chiefs or was Mnyamana kaNgqengelele senior?

He was Cetshwayo's senior chief (and had advised against war), but refused any appointment by the British inthe post-war partition. Added "Cetshwayo's senior chief" here

Thanks for clarification Mujinga (talk) 22:40, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

• "He was killed in a hut there on 2 July" suggest "He was killed in a hut on 2 July"

Done

• "Cetshwayo fled to the Reserve Territory and would die there on 8 February 1884. Cetshwayo's son Dinuzulu recovered the kingdom with assistance from the Boers but was forced to cede territory which became the Nieuwe Republiek and then the Vryheid District of the South African Republic.[36] Zululand was formally annexed by the British in 1887.[37]" - are these last sentences needed in the article about Sihayo kaXongo or should we end with his death? or indeed anything on his particular legacy

Not much more to say about Sihayo unfortunately. I agree with you on the post-death bits and have trimmed these right back

References

• References well laid out, article is neutral, stable, broad and has good focus. No original research.
• Can I check the Laband references really go to pages such as p. lii–liii? i can't find such pages with a google book search

I have only an e-book copy (with 2009 publication date) but yes teh first fifty-odd pages of background information prior to the start of the dictionary are numbered in Roman numerals.

Thanks for checking! Mujinga (talk) 22:42, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

• Damn I can't reconcile the citation on "On 11 January 1879 Frere's ultimatum expired and British forces, under Lord Chelmsford invaded Zululand in three columns, starting the Anglo-Zulu War.[19]" as p. 292 Knight 2000 either, can i ask you to check is correct as well, thanks

Hmm, I don't have a copy of that book to hand (and not sure why I used it in the first place!). I've switched to Laband. The relevant part (from page l) is: "Finally, the British issued an ultimatum requiring him to abolish the iButho system and make other concessions that would disrupt the political, social, and economic structure of his kingdom and place it under British supervision. Cetshwayo did not respond. Thus, on 11 January 1879, British and colonial forces invaded Zululand. The intention of the British commander, Lieutenant-General Lord Chelmsford, was that three invading columns would converge on oNdini, Cetshwayo’s capital, forcing a decisive battle and a quick end to the war". I've changed the wording of the article to state there was no response to the ultimatum, not that it expired on 11 January (as there were some conditions that had to be met after 20 days and some after 30 days).

Great thanks for the clarification Mujinga (talk) 22:42, 6 January 2022 (UTC)