Talk:Scrat/GA1

GA Review

Passed. 1989 (talk) 01:22, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: PrimalMustelid (talk · contribs) 06:28, 16 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: 1989 (talk · contribs) 07:21, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Per WP:COPYVIOEL, the link to the Ice Age artbook in the first citation should be removed.
- Removed. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
If you’re going to use quotes, it should attributed to the person speaking, e.g. non naturalistic
- Cited author. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The Background section shouldn’t be there as it’s WP:UNDUE: It’s primarily about Blue Sky and their movies, nothing about the character.
- Very well, removed. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
pull out that of a squirrel could be worded better
- Reworded. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
confirmed Wedge's account could be worded better
- Reworded. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
golden age of American animation is quite vague. There were no explicit examples?
- Unfortunately no, Wedge did not specify any specific character or franchise as an inspiration for Scrat. If it helps, I added "squash and stretch" since Wedge said that those were the kinds of characters that he derived Scrat sequences from. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
then opting to keep him could be worded better
- Done. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
I think a visual of the Sqrat squirrel could be helpful for the reader, as I'm not sure how Mickey Mouse helps with that.
- Yeah you're right. Swapped Mickey image for a Sqrat image instead, since he is a major part of the subsection. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Supersonic, revealed that Supersonic seems repetitive
- Swapped "Supersonic" for "she." PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
make a deal to make this too.
- Fixed. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Fox lawyers had outfoxed Is there a pun to this?
- Oops, wrote that as a joke in my own sandbox and forgot to change that. Changed to "outpaced." PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
the point that she her
- Fixed. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
helped him to plan out his personality and role The wording is implying this is about the director.
- Specified Scrat regarding personality and role. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
In regard to the 2012 could be worded better.
- Fixed the sentencing. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The Ice Age section title should be italicized.
- Italicized. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Scrat is accidentally stepped and A word is missing.
- Added "on." PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
moving in near the end of the film This is confusing.
- Specified. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
one acorn to hit him from the ground Could this be clarified?
- Done. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
File:Musée Grévin (septembre 2024) 01.jpg should be removed.
- Removed. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
That of Diego ???
- Reworded. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
made slapsticks involving him accessible to audiences What does this mean?
- Wording was vague, reworded. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The last sentence of the second paragraph needs to be reworked.
- Sure, does the reworded sentence work better?
coauthors Something is missing.
- I'm not sure I understand what is missing exactly. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Punctuations like commas should be outside quotes.
- Sure, moved all punctuations outside quotes. PrimalMustelid (talk) 00:48, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

1989 (talk) 20:18, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@1989 Think I addressed everything except for one concern which I'm confused about (the coauthors one). If there's anything else I need to do, let me know. PrimalMustelid (talk) 01:06, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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