Talk:Joseph Hirkala/GA1

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Nominator: Jon698 (talk · contribs) 03:53, 27 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 10:04, 5 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I don't expect us to be so specefic with dates as to mention "November 26, 1940" and "December 1, 1945". Sure, it does no harm, but the same info, without the loss of generality, can be conveyed as "late 1940/45".
~~Rhode Island and San Diego can have a link~~
"He suffered a disability as a result of his service and was hospitalized for over 13 months" -- This was during his serivce or after his service?
"Hirkala was elected as a Republican county committeeman from the 4th ward in 1948." -- for which county?
~~" He ran for commissioner in 1963 with Leonard Simon was his campaign manager," -- 'was' should be 'as'~~
~~", but placed seventh." -- this has nothing much to do with Simon as his campaign manager, can just write "; he came seventh" or soemthing general of that sort.~~
~~"became assistant city clerk of Clifton, New Jersey on" -- Missing MOS:GEOCOMMA~~
"but resigned on June 24" -- any specefic reason in the sources for resigning, or is it just beause he wanted to return to his previous office?
"He supported removing Thomas Eagleton from the Democratic ticket during the 1972 presidential election due to allegations that Eagleton had been arrested for drunk driving in the past" -- Optional: What I recall is that Eagleton was removed due to him allegedly not being psychologically competent to be veep or acting prez, due to some treatment he recieved in the '60s.?!
"For the 1969 election he was redistricted into" -- is "he was redistricted into" a common english usage? I'm not sure if it is.
~~"after he spent $129,176 compared to Job's $102,086" -- Add Template:Inflation to account for present day value.~~
[1] seems somewhat useful resource.

Thats about it. No spot checks performed. References looks finely cited. Image is non-free, but warrented, so fine on that as well. Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 10:31, 5 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Kavyansh.Singh: Thank you for your review. I have applied strikethroughs for the comments I have answered in this edit. As for the Eagleton comment, he faced significant backlash for his drunk driving record 1 2 and this occurred after the psychologically treatment controversy. As for the "he was redistricted into" comment, it is an accepted manner of speech as shown by this Google search 3. I will answer the remaining comments soon. Jon698 (talk) 20:11, 5 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

His service disability was not well documented and was not even mentioned in his obituary. A lot of articles during his life mention a general "service-related disability" from World War II, but never gave a specific ailment. Jon698 (talk) 20:18, 5 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]