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Request for Kanifing on hold

I've put the above request on hold because the requester @Vigilantcosmicpenguin: (courtesy ping) indicates the presence of close paraphrasing, which can often mean copyright violations. I've asked them to either indicate the relevant (sub-)section(s) using a template so the copy-editor knows where the problem text is or, if it's a true copyvio, to remove the problem text and have the revisions deleted. I'm happy for this to stay on hold for a while so this can occur. Cheers, Baffle☿gab 20:34, 16 September 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for the note Baffle☿gab. Nothing needs to be revdelled, the issue was close paraphrasing rather than direct copyvio. As this will be copyedited by a third party, I believe I should be able to approve the DYK following that, so I gone ahead and handled the small amounts of close paraphrasing remaining myself. The copyediting that is desired now is an overall copyedit to help weave the points taken from disparate sources together. Let me know if there is anything else needed. Best, CMD (talk) 02:55, 17 September 2024 (UTC)

Thank you, Chipmunkdavis, my concerns are addressed and I'll now remove my hold notice. I was concerned a copy-editor wouldn't know if text they would consider acceptable, and thus may not reword in any way, may be the exact text they need to adjust. Cheers, Baffle☿gab 03:52, 17 September 2024 (UTC)

Kanifing

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(DYK) I nominated Kanifing for a DYK, and the reviewer noted that the article may have issues with close paraphrasing. The reviewer suggested I take it here so others can help fix these issues. (Pinging the reviewer, Chipmunkdavis.) — Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 16:20, 16 September 2024 (UTC)

 On hold; hi @Vigilantcosmicpenguin:, copyright problems should be dealt with before a copy-edit takes place. If only part of the article is closely paraphrased, please identify the (sub-)section(s) using {{Close paraphrasing}} so a copy-editor knows where to work. If text is close enough to the original to be a copyright violation, it should be removed and the revisions deleted via {{Copyvio-revdel}}. Discuss at REQ talk. Baffle☿gab 20:20, 16 September 2024 (UTC)

Pinging Chipmunkdavis again since they are the one who alerted me of the close paraphrasing issues. CMD, could you add the tags in the relevant sections? I want to make sure the article is tagged accurately. — Vigilant Cosmic Penguin 🐧 (talk | contribs) 21:47, 16 September 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for your note, Vigilantcosmicpenguin, my concerns have now been dealt with and I've removed my hold notice. Cheers, Baffle☿gab 03:57, 17 September 2024 (UTC)

(←)  Working Baffle☿gab 22:26, 23 November 2024 (UTC)

 Done Baffle☿gab 00:45, 24 November 2024 (UTC)

Phillip Jeong

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Phillip Jeong

This is my second article on Wikipedia, and I am enjoying the whole process of collective intelligence. Please help me improve it. I've written the above article and believe I am close to completing it with all the necessary records and citations. As someone who collects historic performances to write articles on Wikipedia, I find it challenging to find detailed critiques in Korea. For example, Leonard Bernstein came to Korea only once, and while newspapers reported what he played, they did not mention his conducting style, orchestration, audience response, etc. I was there, but I cannot cite myself. It is difficult to find articles that can be used as citations for Wikipedia. There are plenty of discussions on social media and blogs, but I understand that these are not acceptable sources. I wouldn't mind if some of the unsubstantiated phrases or sentences need to be deleted. Any help with copyediting or finding reliable sources would be greatly appreciated. Rosuacamus (talk) 11:13, 6 June 2024 (UTC)

Ok I will see if there's any grammar mistakes. Ned1a Wanna talk? 14:57, 10 June 2024 (UTC)

I saw that you made a correction. Thanks a lot. Since they sang in Italian, I put the Italian title with the English one in parentheses. I rewrote a chunk of the text because editors say tabulating everything is too excessive. Please advise me on how to remove the box on top. Rosuacamus (talk) 15:46, 10 June 2024 (UTC)

Hi! @Rosuacamus I don't understand what you mean by the box? Do you mean the userbox? Ned1a Wanna talk? 17:47, 10 June 2024 (UTC)

I meant the message box at the top of the Phillip Jeong article: "This article may require copy editing for grammar, style, cohesion, tone, or spelling." Any help to improve the article is welcome! Rosuacamus (talk) 21:29, 10 June 2024 (UTC)

I think to just get rid the the template. Ned1a Wanna talk? 14:26, 12 June 2024 (UTC)

Can I just do that? Rosuacamus (talk) 14:59, 12 June 2024 (UTC)

Thanks a lot! Rosuacamus (talk) 15:02, 12 June 2024 (UTC)

Your welcome! :?D Ned1a Wanna talk? 15:04, 12 June 2024 (UTC)

(←)  Working Baffle☿gab 01:30, 30 September 2024 (UTC)

 Done Baffle☿gab 03:35, 30 September 2024 (UTC)

Chihiro (song)

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Chihiro (song)

With over 295 hits per day, the article needs serious copy editing to get to WP:GA (GAN) dxneo (talk) 16:59, 7 June 2024 (UTC)

Hi, @Dxneo. I'll be working on it soon. I just have to complete some pending things and I'll take care of you. Santi (talk) 03:12, 23 June 2024 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the request Santi. dxneo (talk) 08:18, 25 June 2024 (UTC)

@Pollosito, when are you going to work on this article? Mox Eden (talk) 03:01, 1 July 2024 (UTC)

@Mox Eden: I guess at the end of July. Now I've graduated from high school and I'm no longer allowed to use the computer, so I'll have to do it on my cell phone. In case I haven't done anything by the end of July, you can pick this because I see you're interested too. Santi (talk) 00:13, 2 July 2024 (UTC)

I've asked Pollosito about this request on their talk page; since their message here, they hasn't edited the article but is still active on WP. Baffle☿gab 05:31, 20 September 2024 (UTC)

Since this this discussion, and the one on their talk page, Pollosito hasn't edited this article so I'm going to boldly take over this request. Discuss at REQ talk or send complaints to /dev/null. Baffle☿gab 02:02, 2 October 2024 (UTC)

(←)  Working Baffle☿gab 02:02, 2 October 2024 (UTC)

 Done Baffle☿gab 03:28, 2 October 2024 (UTC)

Death Race 2

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Death Race 2

For GAN. Please check whether the prose checks out on verifiability longer quotes in the Reception section (excluding the one in the quotebox) can be paraphrased. Thanks, Nineteen Ninety-Four guy (talk) 12:32, 24 June 2024 (UTC)

@Nineteen Ninety-Four guy:, please note citation-checking is not part of the copy-editing process. Per WP:BURDEN, the person adding the material is responsible for its accuracy and verifiability. Copy-editing is a "final prose polish" not a general fix-me-up. Cheers, Baffle☿gab 04:47, 27 June 2024 (UTC)

I see. I've struck that part of my request to reflect this. Nineteen Ninety-Four guy (talk) 06:16, 27 June 2024 (UTC)

(←)  Working Baffle☿gab 06:33, 11 October 2024 (UTC)

 Done Baffle☿gab 04:43, 12 October 2024 (UTC)

Brown bear

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Brown bear

Same as the user above; I'd like to get this article FA-ready (FAC). Thanks Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 10:09, 28 June 2024 (UTC)

I looked over it and fixed a couple small things that I found, but I'd like someone with more experience to look it over before I mark it done. Moritoriko (talk) 05:02, 11 October 2024 (UTC)

For FAC prep, I highly recommend WP:PR. dxneo (talk) 20:34, 13 October 2024 (UTC)

This article needs a copy edit. Just in the lead, I see "long lived", "The pelage ranges from reddish to yellowish-brown, and dark brown to cream in color", "wide 21 to 36 cm (8.3 to 14.2 in) long paws", "brown bears predominately feed on", "it is a solitary animal that only associates when", "just c. 50 bears". Elsewhere in the article, the serial comma is used inconsistently. This should be a fun one for somebody. I'll take it if I have a spare couple of hours, but anyone is welcome to grab it. – Jonesey95 (talk) 20:43, 15 October 2024 (UTC)

I will take this. I assume that the errors listed above are: "pelage" is too choice or educated usage for "fur"; "wide" and "long" are confusing; "predominately" should be "predominantly"; "solitary" should be "usually solitary"; and "c." is too cryptic. Let me know what I have missed. Dhtwiki (talk) 00:14, 16 October 2024 (UTC)

Also that "long lived" needs hyphenation. I have just made several corrections to the lead. Dhtwiki (talk) 00:43, 16 October 2024 (UTC)

•  Working Dhtwiki (talk) 00:14, 16 October 2024 (UTC)
•  Done Dhtwiki (talk) 23:55, 19 October 2024 (UTC)

Request for Research on tornadoes in 2024 on hold

This probably needs no comment yet but I've put the request for the above article on hold because the article is currently at AFD here. Courtesy ping: TheNuggeteer currently has a Working tag on the request; they may continue to work on the article if they wish. The AFD currently looks like a keep or merge outcome. I apologize for not noticing the AFD earlier. Cheers, Baffle☿gab 03:21, 23 October 2024 (UTC)

No apology needed, Baffle; I really appreciate what you do. Since TheNuggeteer hasn't edited the article since the 19th (but voted keep in the deletion discussion) and the discussion is now leaning merge, I suggest we decline for now. All the best, Miniapolis 13:52, 27 October 2024 (UTC)

Thanks Miniapolis; the discussion is trending towards a merge so I agree to decline; much of this article's content may be lost in the merge and the requester is always welcome to submit a request for the merged article. Cheers, Baffle☿gab 18:47, 27 October 2024 (UTC)

I actually was planning to withdraw after I voted keep not because of the discussion. Thank you though. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 (My "blotter") 11:28, 4 November 2024 (UTC)

Since the discussion closed as merge, I'll decline. All the best, Miniapolis 16:39, 4 November 2024 (UTC)

 ... but it looks like it's been archived. Miniapolis 16:42, 4 November 2024 (UTC)

Request for S. Sathyendra on hold

I've put the request for the above BLP article on hold and suggest we wait a short while then decline because the article, as the requester @DareshMohan: (courtesy ping) says here, it is largely unsourced. Unsourced content in BLP articles should be either cited or removed, so c/e-ing this would be pointless until this unsourced content is dealt with. GOCE is not Cleanup. Cheers, Baffle☿gab 07:02, 30 October 2024 (UTC)

Per their request at their talk page here (permalink), I've replaced the requester's two earlier c/e requests with another two. There's never a dull moment at the Guild. :) Cheers, Baffle☿gab 20:47, 3 November 2024 (UTC)

Issue with page notice at REQ

Hi all, I noticed a while back the archiving bot at REQ doesn't archive requests that have an asterisk in them. First-world problem, I know. So I've been removing asterisks from the page. After a chat with @Dhtwiki: (courtesy ping) here (permalink), I see the asterisks are added by the page notice, which I don't have permission to edit. TBH, I edit without JavaScript and didn't even know that template was able to do that! There are three solutions I can see:

a) edit the page notice to remove asterisks and replace them with a colon or double colon;

b) bother the bot operator to try and stop it from ignoring asterisks; or

c) continue with regular manual asterisk removal.

I think (a) as the best solution if it can be done; (b) is less good because there may be times when we want to stop the bot archiving a subsection and it involves poking the bot op; and (c) is a daily chore I won't always be around to do, although it will help me reach 100,000 edits more quickly! Cheers, Baffle☿gab 19:33, 13 December 2024 (UTC)

Fixed per (a) (I think), although the colons are hard to see . All the best, Miniapolis 23:36, 13 December 2024 (UTC)

Thank you Miniapolis; it should save us a bit of work there! :) Cheers, Baffle☿gab 05:47, 14 December 2024 (UTC)

Follow up: Dhtwiki's test here (diff) showed the bot doesn't have a problem with asterisks so I apologize for making a fuss. I'l try and work out what really happened. I think this earlier bot outage (permalink) has something to do with it. :) I'll use asterisks in my next request; see what happens. Cheers, 22:36, 15 December 2024 (UTC)

Well, I guess this confirms the bot doesn't trip over asterisks. I'm sorry for messing you both about. Baffle☿gab 06:42, 18 December 2024 (UTC)

Eat Bulaga!

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Eat Bulaga!

Hi! Please help me to fix this article because i want to nominate this on Featured Article (FAC). Royiswariii (talk) 05:51, 25 October 2024 (UTC)

 Note: The requester has been blocked for account sharing. —Tenryuu 🐲 ( 💬 • 📝 ) 03:25, 1 November 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for noting this, @Tenryuu:. That user has requested an unblock, saying they were joking about sharing the account. I think we can agf for now but if the block is upheld, please put the request on hold and post at REQ talk. Cheers, Baffle☿gab 07:21, 1 November 2024 (UTC)

Update: The requester's account has now been unblocked. AGF and carry on. Baffle☿gab 08:38, 8 November 2024 (UTC)

• More or less  Done. I've corrected grammar and such throughout the article. It remains quite stylistically choppy in places, and I think the whole thing could do with a de-crufting, but I'll leave that for someone else who has the intestinal fortitude (and hopefully a modicum of knowledge about Filipino pop culture, which I lack). Fluffernutter (talk) 14:19, 17 December 2024 (UTC)

Tropical Storm Kai-tak

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Tropical Storm Kai-tak

Hi! I'm not a good copyeditor myself, so I'm requesting another article. I fixed a lot, but this needs more fixes. This is pretty lengthy, but this is an interesting article. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 (My "blotter") 08:47, 16 December 2024 (UTC)

• @TheNuggeteer:  Done. However, there was one sentence I struggled to untangle, and I think it could use more attention:
  Under "Rebuilding", there is a sentence that says (after my tweaks) "The project required three phases: the planning, which was initiated in December and was finished in January, Implementation, which was deployed shortly after and ended in February, and then the full second phase, with whom a partner deployed another related project, which was deployed in April and ended at the end of the year." This is...really unclear. My understanding of it, which may or may not be accurate, is that there were three phases:

1. The planning phase (begun in Dec, ended in Jan)
2. The implementation phase (why is "Implementation" capitalized?) (begun in January and ended in February)
3. The second...phase? But we've already covered two phases, so isn't this the third phase?? Also what partner, and what related project, and why aren't we naming those? And once we sort that out, we really ought to change at least one of those "deployed"s to some other word to avoid repetition.

If you can give me some clarity on that sentence, I'm happy to go back in and rework it accordingly. Fluffernutter (talk) 16:48, 17 December 2024 (UTC)

Sorry for taking long, I was busy updating things. For 1st, nothing's wrong with it, right? For the 2nd, uncapitalize Implementation. For the 3rd, the source states that it's named the "second phase" even though it's supposed to be the third. I found that the partner was CBO, which I don't know. I tried searching, but the only thing that popped up was Cotabato Airport, and I don't think an airport is eligible to be a business partner. For the rest of the changes, sure.

Thanks for copyediting this article! 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 (My "blotter") 00:01, 18 December 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for the quick response, TheNuggeteer! Between what you said here and what is said in the source, I pieced together a version of that sentence that I'm happy with. So your copyedit is now officially done! Fluffernutter (talk) 13:26, 18 December 2024 (UTC)

Veiqia

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Veiqia

I'm working towards a FA nomination (FAC) for veiqia (tattooing practice in Fiji) and have just competed a copy edit myself, but I would be really grateful if another editor has time and interest to look for things I may have missed Lajmmoore (talk) 11:51, 13 November 2024 (UTC)

 Partly done. Worked on this for style, punctuation, smooth English reading and general cleanup. Consider it good and ready to be blessed by a more senior copy editor of the GOCE. Here.it.comes.again (talk) 04:18, 16 November 2024 (UTC)

 Done – It reads well. During a quick read, I didn't see anything more than something I *might* have changed if I thought more about it but was very likely correct. Dhtwiki (talk) 06:35, 19 December 2024 (UTC)

Bini (group)

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Bini (group)

I'm requesting to take a review on this to be renominate on GAN. If you have any questions just let me know. Royiswariii Talk! 05:16, 15 December 2024 (UTC)

• Mostly  Done, but I'd appreciate a second review from another copyeditor, specifically on the matter of number agreement involving the group's name. Something about the way it's sometimes referred to as "they" and sometimes as "it", with corresponding conjugations in other words ("they were" but "it was"), throughout the article is nagging at me, but I can't quite put a finger on how to straighten it out to make things consistent. Fluffernutter (talk) 13:58, 18 December 2024 (UTC)

For the most part the article reads well. Sentences such as:

Fans and critics alike have praised Bini for their stable vocals, excellent synchronization, and meaningful lyrics.

On May 4, 2021, Bini released their first official debut teaser through a QR code leading to an image that reads "Are you ready for the Biniverse?"

work because "Bini" is an implied plural noun.

Sentences such as:

From this pool of auditionees, with recommendations from talent scouts, the first set of female SHA trainees, 12 girls, was selected. While Dyogi initially planned to debut a nine-member idol girl group, it was eventually trimmed down to eight girls:... ("...it was eventually..." -> "...which was eventually..."?)

In February 2022, the group was featured on the cover of the Dubai-based magazine Xpedition as "The Burgeoning Grace", making Bini one of the first Filipino celebrities, alongside brother group BGYO, to have an NFT magazine cover launched through the Metaverse. ("making Bini one of the first Filipino celebrities" -> "making Bini among the first Filipino celebrities"?)

are problematic (and those were the only two I could find). Dhtwiki (talk) 09:56, 19 December 2024 (UTC)

Maxwell's Silver Hammer

I'm not sure whether to mark the request here (permalink} for Maxwell's Silver Hammer should be marked withdrawn. On their talk page, the requester @BernaBotto: says there's "nothing to do cuz my editions have been reverted", and they haven't responded to me on their talk. Should I accept their comment as a withdrawal without confirmation? Meanwhile, I'll put the request on hold. Cheers, Baffle☿gab' 21:27, 28 December 2024 (UTC)

@Baffle gab1978: Yes, it was an withdrawn. BernaBotto (talk) 21:45, 28 December 2024 (UTC)

Thanks, I'll mark it so. :) Cheers, Baffle☿gab 22:35, 28 December 2024 (UTC)

Maxwell's Silver Hammer

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Hi, that's my first time writing an article in english, so i'm not so used to the grammar. The FAC failed and Skyshifter recommended to come here. BernaBotto (talk) 15:39, 16 December 2024 (UTC)

• I've reviewed the article in its current version and didn't spot anything that needed fixing from a copyediting POV. It looks from page history like BernaBotto attempted some large changes and then the changes were reverted back to the status quo ante, so I'm not sure there actually is anything to do at this point. BernaBotto, can you specify if there's particular issues outstanding that you're aware of or if this request is now moot? (I'll leave a note to this effect on BB's talk as well). Fluffernutter (talk) 18:16, 20 December 2024 (UTC)

 On hold per Flufffernutter and comments on the requester's talk page. Discuss at REQ. Baffle☿gab 21:32, 28 December 2024 (UTC)

 Request withdrawn per discussion at REQ talk (link above). Discuss there. Baffle☿gab 22:39, 28 December 2024 (UTC)