Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/The Post-Modern Prometheus/archive1

Resolved comments from TBran dl ey 20:07, 28 August 2012 (UTC)

The image in the infobox needs its rationale to be expanded
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Shouldn't "5" be linked to The X-Files (season 5), not the episodes' list
Yes. I have changed this.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Where is the production code referenced?
Added.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:07, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Where is the running time referenced?
The actual episode. You don't need to reference the episode in an article about the episode.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Well, actually, it is the running time without commercials. There is something at the iTunes Store that you could reference, for X-Files Season 5. TBran dl ey 20:03, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Or the DVD. Either way, its really splitting hairs.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:09, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I added it.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:11, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
premiered → originally aired
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
viewers in its → viewers upon its
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In the lede, I see "The episode was nominated for seven Emmy Awards and won one. The episode". Two sentences start with "the episode" there. Perhaps change one to "this entry", etc.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
that season → the series' fifth season
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In plot, link FBI first its first time. First mention in actual article
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Shaineh Berkowitz is missing actor in the plot section
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
special agent Scully. For the FBI, also?
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Izzy is missing actor in plot
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Great Mutato is missing actor in plot
It's there, I just didn't include it at first because the first mention is of the "mythic" creature.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
K. TBran dl ey 20:03, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Missing comma after "Drosophila" in the plot area
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Elizabeth is missing actor in plot
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Perhaps rearrange/move some images around. See MOS:IMAGELOCATION, which says images shouldn't start in a section at left side. But, there are little exepection, so. I don't really know
Right hand bias... Just kidding Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Lol. :) TBran dl ey 20:03, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Unlink fairy tale per WP:OVERLINK; common term
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Unlink folk tales per WP:OVERLINK; common term
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"comedy animation show" sounds kind of strange/weird for some. Change to "animated television sitcom", "animated comedy series", or something else
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In Production, link monster of the week since its the first time mentioned in the article. Also, monster of the week says "Monster-of-the-Week" in the lede. Which one? Probably go with the way used in the lede, "Monster-of-the-Week"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
and stands apart. Use "which" instead of "and". Also, it isn't the same as way used in lede. Choose one for that full sentence. In lead, it says is unconnected to the overarching mythology of The X-Files. In production, its different.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link wider mythology to Mythology of The X-Files. Linked in lede, in addition to that.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link Cher; first time in actual article
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Remove "had" in casting in "had also expressed an interest" sentence
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"movie" should IMO be changed to "film". Sounds like more of a word for Wikipedia
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The first five seasons of The X-Files, including "The Post-Modern Prometheus", were filmed in Vancouver." reference
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In "Filming", link Emmy award, and capitalize "award".
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"his best episode score that season". Huh.
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The latter is played at the end of the episode when the agents take the Great Mutato to a Cher concert.[12] The character". Two sentences start with the. Change it up a bit.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Only link "sixth season", without "episode" linked in themes.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
""The Post-Modern Prometheus" is the most obvious reference to Frankenstein made by the series, although traces of the story are seen elsewhere, in the first season episode "Young at Heart", the sixth season episode "The Beginning" and in the overreaching mythology of the show that revolves around shadowy Syndicate leaders who salvage alien spacecraft for their own technological use and create human-alien hybrids." Wow; that's a big sentence. Merge into two, perhaps.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"the fourth season's "Home". Remove "the".
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In the image in broadcast/reception, link Chris Carter, as per WP:OVERLINK
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The Post-Modern Prometheus" was first broadcast in the United States on November 30, 1997, on the Fox network. The episode subsequently premiered in the United Kingdom on October 17, 1998, on BBC One" → "The Post-Modern Prometheus" originally aired on the Fox network on November 30, 1997, and was first broadcast in the United Kingdom on BBC One on October 17, 1998"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The Post-Modern Prometheus" was first broadcast in the United States on November 30, 1997, on the Fox network." reference?
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Small sub-sections make the article kind of small jumbled.
Don't really see why. They follow a pattern, and this article is modeled on "Triangle".--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Sure. It's fine. I don't what to be that WP:IDONTLIKEIT person. Cheers, TBran dl ey 20:03, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Re-write how Nielsen ratings stuff is wrote to match with "Triangle" and "Squeeze"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Please explain what a Nielsen rating is for reader not aware of it.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link Nielsen ratings in broadcast/reception, since it is the first mention in the actual article.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
After its initial broadcast, "The Post-Modern Prometheus" received mostly positive reviews. → "The Post-Modern Prometheus" generally received positive reviews from critics since its original broadcast."
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"Series creator and director Chris Carter". Remove "series creator and director". That's already been clarified above.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Missing a period in that sentence in notes
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 3: How are there two publishers. One should be in italics.
One is a company, and the other is a website. The company shouldn't be italicized and the website shouldn't either. One doesn't HAVE to be in italics.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
K. TBran dl ey 20:03, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 12: I think that citing/referencing the episode is original research. Replace/remove, etc.
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:02, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ref. 26: WP:DASH problems.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Why do some references end the url title with a comma, while some are with a period. Example: "Ref. 25 uses comma, and Ref. 26 uses periods."
I have no idea. It's just the formatting of the citation templates and I don't know how to fix that.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Okay then. No worries about it. TBran dl ey 20:03, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Don't think book references should be in small writing text. Consider MOS:ACCESS.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"TheXFiles.com" → "XFiles.com". That link comes from X-Files.com, not TheX-Files
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
on → at for first external link
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Remove external wikia link which contains nothing worthwhile not already present in the article. Consider WP:ELNO.
I don't see why it needs to go. It does add something. It's also in all the other articles.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Categories should be sorted in alphabetical order
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:50, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

TBran dl ey 19:13, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Crisco 1492

FBI special agent Dana Scully - Since we already said they're partners, I don't think this "FBI" is necessary.
Removed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Angrily confronts Pollidori Sr. but he ends up dead? Does Pollidori Jr. kill him?
Clarified.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The episode was heavily inspired by Mary Shelley's famous novel Frankenstein." - Is "famous" needed?
Removed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"found it difficult to reconcile Mary Shelley's unbelievable tale with the style of the show." - No action required, just a bit of snark: he found a science-fiction story unable to be reconciled with a science-fiction show, with aliens? Star Trek would have had a parallel world based on the novel, like the gangster one.
Yeah, it is rather silly. Oh Chris Carter...--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Perhaps a link to James Whale?
It should already be there...--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No link to Anne Simon?
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"a friend of Simon," - Name available?
Unfortunately, no.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Great Mutato in the Simpsons? Huh? What episode? I've watched every episode of the first 10 seasons and don't recall seeing a Mutato.
Whoops. Had to re-listen. It was a comic, not an episode.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link season four
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Link Jeffrey Spender
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Perhaps link wide-angle lens in the image caption
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Should be special effects supervisor or Special Effects Supervisor, not Special Effects supervisor
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"seven 1998 Emmy Awards by the Academy of Television Arts & Sciences." - Reads illogically. Perhaps "seven awards at the 1998 Emmys by the Academy of Television Arts & Sciences.
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Starpulse - What makes their review significant and worth noting? TV Equals?
Removed. I added a few more, from reliable newspapers.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Add citations after direct quotes.
I think I got all these. I'll make sure.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I did a light copyedit, be sure to double check.
That's it from me. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:03, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Alright, I believe I've addressed all your concerns!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:28, 1 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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