Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/United States Marine Corps
After a significant rework over the past few weeks, I'd like some other opinions on this article as a precursor to a FA- nomination. There are two specific unresolved issues I'd like opinions on - there are two sections marked as disputed for factual accuracy or POV. I intend to delete them but would prefer some other opinions before I do so. --Mmx1 19:21, 13 August 2006 (UTC)
A very nice article, however:
- I'm worried about the size. 85k is just gigantic. And the TOC is gigantic as well. Although, if adequately referenced with a generous amount of footnotes, it could pass easily.
- There are disputed tags on some sections and {{fact}} templates somewhere, those obviously need to be corrected before the article can go through a FAC. I'm no expert and therefore don't see any problems with POV, but these tags have to be dealt with.
- The "famous marines" section is too short and could use at least two or three paragraphs (no that does not contradict my previous statement about the article being too long :)
- There are way too much lists that could be spinned off into child articles or converted to prose (or both, using summary style in the parent article) or converted into charts.
- There are some one sentence paragraphs that could be merged together.
- Some sections have no refs in them ("Aircraft") for instance. Generally speaking, 36 refs is barely enough for such an amount of prose, because statistically, it means some facts have a high chance of not being referenced (just from a statistical point of view).
Overall, NPOV should be dealt with and missing citations added. The size could also pose a problem, altough if adequately referenced with a generous amount of footnotes, it could pass easily.
-- Grafikm (AutoGRAF) 19:38, 13 August 2006 (UTC)
- It needs more intext citations.
"The Marines' most famous action of this period occurred in the First Barbary War (1801–1805) when William Eaton and First Lieutenant Presley O'Bannon led a group of eight Marines and 300 Arab and European mercenaries in an attempt to capture Tripoli. Though they only made it as far as Derna, Tripoli has been immortalized in the Marines Hymn and the Mameluke sword carried by Marine officers."
Potter(Hg), E.B. und Chester W. Nimitz (Hg.): Sea Power. A Naval History. London, Prentice Hall International, 1960. 932 S., 4° describes the history, tactics and strategies of the US Navy and Marines pretty much in detail, especially this incident, but it is very heavy (gives some muscles) to read. Wandalstouring 15:24, 15 August 2006 (UTC)
- Thank you both for the feedback; I will fix or address them on the talk page --Mmx1 03:09, 19 August 2006 (UTC)
- I recall from the book mentioned, US marines used tomahawks. Wandalstouring 22:26, 31 August 2006 (UTC)