Wikipedia:WikiProject Film/Peer review/The Public Enemy
I'd like to get it to a GA and would like to know what to expand on. Cbrown1023 21:58, 12 December 2006 (UTC)
- Expand the lead. Put in the excellent reception for the film, the release info (that it was cut down), the controversy about the grapefruit, perhaps mention that it was based off a book.
I added a boiler-plate fair use rationale for the poster. Check to see if the poster hasn't fallen into the public domain though.- Thanks, I missed that part. :) Cbrown1023 03:05, 14 December 2006 (UTC)
- Was Matt Doyle the other boy leaning against the wall?
- What? Cbrown1023 23:42, 14 December 2006 (UTC)
- This is what I meant. Here from the first paragraph "before directing the viewer’s attention to two boys growing up with the resultant lure of corruption". You mention that one of the boys is Tom, and then in the second paragraph you start talking about Tom and Matt. Am I supposed to assume that Matt was the other boy leaning against the wall with Tom? Hmmm, on a more careful reading this is indicate, but perhaps you could clarify it by saying "After Tom Powers (James Cagney) and the other boy, Matt Doyle (Edward Woods), grow into young adults".--Supernumerary 00:16, 15 December 2006 (UTC)
- Gotcha, fixed it. I didn't write the summary (I haven't seen the movie) so I am not that familiar with it. Cbrown1023 00:26, 15 December 2006 (UTC)
- This is what I meant. Here from the first paragraph "before directing the viewer’s attention to two boys growing up with the resultant lure of corruption". You mention that one of the boys is Tom, and then in the second paragraph you start talking about Tom and Matt. Am I supposed to assume that Matt was the other boy leaning against the wall with Tom? Hmmm, on a more careful reading this is indicate, but perhaps you could clarify it by saying "After Tom Powers (James Cagney) and the other boy, Matt Doyle (Edward Woods), grow into young adults".--Supernumerary 00:16, 15 December 2006 (UTC)
- What? Cbrown1023 23:42, 14 December 2006 (UTC)
- Early on it says that Tom Powers was played by Cagney, but then you say that Cagney's character smashes a grapefruit in his girlfriend's face and you parenthetically note who played her. Later on you say that Tom's girlfriend is played by someone else. Another girlfriend or a mistake?
- "in which the character of real-life gangster Bugs Moran was cut out" A character based off of Bugs or did Bugs play a part?
- You need to work Warner brothers in before you say "the studio promised" because I immediately though "Which studio?"
- Add a closing spoiler tag.
- But that's not in the usage. (Template talk:Endspoiler#Usage) Cbrown1023 03:05, 14 December 2006 (UTC)
Your ref citing is inconsistent in style (meaning sometimes you use the template, others you don't).- The two you are reffering to I didn't even notice, they just appeared their Sunday and I must've missed it on my watchlist. But done. Cbrown1023 03:05, 14 December 2006 (UTC)
- Consider adding a picture somewhere. That one site you linked has a plethora, and a photo of Cagney couldn't go amiss.
--Supernumerary 02:41, 14 December 2006 (UTC)
- "The film was avoided by some because of its graphic elements."
- What type of people avoided the film? Also, there should be a citation for this - people avoid films for many reasons. LuciferMorgan 02:20, 15 December 2006 (UTC)
I passed a GA for this. Mind, remove the out-of-universe sentence at the end of the Plot section. Wiki-newbie 17:21, 15 December 2006 (UTC)
- Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 23:19, 15 December 2006 (UTC)