Wikipedia:WikiProject Aviation/Peer review/Japan Airlines

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Japan Airlines

I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take this article to FA-status. Greatly appreciate any input!

Thanks,

Aviator006 (talk) 08:03, 25 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ian Rose

I'm not an expert on airline articles but as far as FA in general goes, this looks like a good candidate. Comments:

Structure, level of detail, and illustrations seem up to scratch. I haven't checked the licensing for the images but I see that all have alt text.
Prose-wise it could probably do with an outside copy-edit. Just in the intro for instance there's a sentence like The group has a fleet of 279 aircraft, consists of only Boeing aircraft for its long-haul operations; and Airbus, Boeing and McDonnell Douglas aircraft for its short-haul operations. This could be tweaked to something like The group has a fleet of 279 aircraft, which consists of Boeing aircraft for long-haul operations, and Airbus, Boeing and McDonnell Douglas aircraft for short-haul operations (added "which", lost the "only", substituted semi-colon for comma, lost both "its").
Sentence updated as suggested. Aviator006 (talk) 03:17, 5 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

What is the relevance in saying Boeing aircraft for long-haul? It seems meaningless unless you state WHICH Boeing aircraft are used for long0haiul. The same applies for the short haul aircraft, just quoting the manufacturer is meaningless!Petebutt (talk) 17:46, 30 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Referencing-wise, the article is very well cited, however I'm a bit surprised that it appears only online sources are used. Are there no books on JAL or at least general airline/aviation works that cover some of its history and current operations as well? Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 23:03, 26 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think so. Either the sections about JAL are too brief to be citable, or there simply are no books about JAL. I am a violinist ♫ talk to me here! 05:07, 3 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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