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Vulcanoid asteroid

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've rewritten it pretty much from scratch and I've reached the limit of what I can do on my own. I think I've got it to a reasonable standard but I'd like some ideas for improvement- particularly the lead, which I think is a bit patchy. I would like to push for good article status fairly soon.

Thanks, Reyk _YO! 06:51, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very interesting and seems pretty close to GA to me, here are some nit-picky suggestions for improvement.

According to WP:HEAD, History and Observation should be History and observation
- Done
I would add details on their possible sizes (upper and lower limits) and perhaps most likely orbits to the lead
- Done
Suggested copyedit to first two sentences The vulcanoids are a hypothetical population of asteroids that may orbit the sun in a dynamically stable zone within the orbit of the planet Mercury. They are named after the hypothetical planet Vulcan, whose existence was disproven in YEAR.
- Done
Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase. They should also be in numerical order.
- Mostly done- all the inline citations are now in numerical order and come after the punctuation. The mid-sentence citations I have left because putting them at the end of the sentence would imply that the sources for that sentence back up the whole sentence, rather than just a portion of it. The example given at Wikipedia:References does the same.
Nice images (nice job making some of them too) However in File:Vulcanoidorbits.png the orbit labels are too small to read legibly on my monitor and the caption should make it clearer that the green disc is the region meant.
- Done. Thanks. I'm particularly happy with the way the first one came out.
There are a few one or two sentence paragraphs that should probably be expanded or combined with others to improve flow.
- Done
I would explain why the 2000 and 2002 attempts by Stern did not find anything.
- I can't find an explanation in any of the sources.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 13:35, 4 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Your input is very much appreciated. Regards, Reyk _YO! 23:22, 4 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]