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I've listed this article for peer review because a lot of work has gone into this article I would like any comments or suggestions that would help it get promoted to GA status.

Thanks, J.D. (talk) 14:34, 18 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]


Comments by Jappalang

Plot

  • "he remains haunted by seeing his father commit suicide on his 48th birthday by jumping off the roof of the family's home"
    Not really sure what to make of this sentence. How about "he is haunted by the imagery of his father's suicide, which he witnessed."
  • "Nicholas finds the game is real, which starts to put his business, reputation, finances, and safety at risk."
    How?
  • "... and also comes under risk."
    Like?
  • "... and fire upon them."
    With what? I know what "fire upon" means but I suspect it is a slang term (for firearm-related action) that is unlikely encyclopaedic. Also note the sudden incongruity of having game company employees shoot people; is there a better way to segue this information into the plot?
  • "... until he learns the truth."
    What truth? Is it really the truth? Or do you mean "until she tells him the truth behind the game."
  • "Christine realizes that Nicholas' gun is not a prop, as CRS was unaware of its presence."
    Does this sentence matter in the scheme of the whole summary?

Production

  • "The Game began as a spec screenplay, ..."
    What is a spec screenplay
  • "... who put the project in turnaround, ..."
    What does that mean?
  • "Fincher intended to make The Game before Seven but when Brad Pitt became available that project took priority."
    I believe this can be ambiguous: "that project" refers to which? Can this sentence be rephrased as well? How was Pitt's availability a factor in prioritising Seven?
  • "However, the actress had a scheduling conflict with the Robert Zemeckis film Contact and could not appear in The Game."
    The first part of the sentence suggest she would not join Contact, I think this should be rephrased, like "However, the actress was about to act in Robert Zemeckis' Contact and could not fit The Game into her schedule."
  • "Deborah Kara Unger's auditioned for the role of Christine with test reel consisting of a two-minute sex scene from David Cronenberg's Crash."
    Something is wrong with this sentence (possessives and noun-gerund constructs).
  • "... once Nicholas' left his protective world, ..."
    Again the possessives...
  • "... known as ENR ..."
    Any way to get the full terminology than just presenting it as an acronym? Is there a Wikipedia article on this? Is there some reliable source that explains what this is?
  • "The scene where Nicholas' taxi drives into the San Francisco Bay was shot near the Embarcadero with the close-up of Douglas trapped in the back seat filmed on a soundstage at Sony Pictures studio in a large tank of water."
    I think this is a run-on sentence, which can be effectively split into two.

Reception

  • Effectively, it comprises a paragraph and two separate sentences... and the paragraph is mainly quotes. I would prefer a more thematic reception where key points of the reviewers are grouped.

Images

  • File:TheGame poster323.jpg
    Was this image self-taken or from a website? Refer to WP:CITE#IMAGE for image source requirements. Furthermore, "This is a promotional poster for the movie this article describes" is a bit bare for a fair use rationale (the standard boilerplate 10-pointer is not much better). Consider beefing it up.

I am not certain but I get left with a feeling that there might be more to this film than what we have. Perhaps there is simply not enough information covered by reliable sources, but I think currently the article give a slightly more than bare bones feel. This might be unresolvable (and thus moot) if there are no more reliable sources that cover this film. Jappalang (talk) 01:16, 28 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for all of your hard work! There isn't much more reliable sources that I could find. Hopefully, the long-rumored special edition DVD that the Criterion Collection might do will have substantial extras that will shed more light on this film.--J.D. (talk) 19:11, 30 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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