Wikipedia:Peer review/Rwandan genocide/archive1

Rwandan genocide

It's been a while since this article's last Good Article Nomination, and it has expanded considerably since then. I don't see any obvious issues at first glance, other than the History.com ref, but maybe someone else can shed some more light on this.

I consider peer review of this article important, since Encyclopedia Britannica still hasn't covered possibly the worst post-Cold War mass genocide, happening in 1994 with 500K-1M dead (though to be fair, they were busy going broke competing with Microsoft Encarta).⸺(Random)staplers 22:51, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

Some drive by comments, not a deep dive by any means

- In the Preparation for genocide section there are several one or two sentence paragraphs and one massive paragraph. The way this is structured feels unfortunate to me and the information presentation would be improved by altering this

- sexual violence, again why the one sentence paragraph, not cohesive

- Killing of the Twa, one paragraph level-one heading - should either be expanded to show its significance for that level of heading or folded into another section if it's not

- Rwandan Patriotic Front's military campaign and victory, again why the one sentence paragraph, not cohesive

-France and Opération Turquoise, again why the one sentence paragraph, not cohesive

- "HBO Films released the made-for-television historical drama film titled Sometimes in April in 2005." unsourced

- "Pierre Rutare, the Tutsi father of Belgian-Rwandan singer Stromae, was killed in the 1994 Rwandan Genocide." unsourced

- Commemoration, another level-one one paragraph heading. this feels like it can be significantly expanded

- Maps of Rwanda any particular reason why this is here

citations:

The citation formatting is generally inconsistent. Some news sources are rendered as long cites and some are in bibliography and given shortened cites. Pick one or the other for news/non-paginated sources. formatting should be more consistent also

- many sources need to be properly formatted for consistency

- need page on kirschke citation

- there has to be a better source than the unlinked Akayesu trial document

- citation from Genin, Aaron should be sentence or title case not all caps

- citation from huffpost should be replaced, there has to be a better source for this given the scholarship available on this topic

- replace history.com source, unreliable

- the order of genocide is repeated as full cite, move to bibliography and do shortened footnotes for consistency PARAKANYAA (talk) 00:39, 18 September 2024 (UTC)

@Randomstaplers, tagging you in case you haven't seen the above comments. Matarisvan (talk) 12:47, 9 October 2024 (UTC)

@Matarisvan - Yeah, I've seen them already. I've already started a to-do list.⸺(Random)staplers 02:33, 10 October 2024 (UTC)

Borsoka

Thank you for this important article on one of the most tragic events of post-WWII world history. I think the article is really near to GA or even FA. Please find my comments below:

• Consider introducing people when they are first mentioned: Kanyarwanda > the mythical king Kanyarwanda; Ruhanga > the god Ruhanga, Yoweri Museveni > the military strongman Yoweri Museveni etc.
• Citation style should be standardised (for instance, citation No [28] differs from the previous ones)
• Make sure that all pieces of information are properly introduced (for instance, the reference to a pro-Tutsi party comes out of the blue in section 1.2 in lack of a previous reference to the party system in Rwanda; we are not informed why the Belgians started to support the Hutu; who created the republic?, etc).
• Please doublecheck the use of tenses: "the Tutsi origin myth holds that Kanyarwanda had several sons, including Gatutsi and Gahutu, ancestors of the Tutsi and Hutu who are therefore brothers"; These exiles, unlike the Banyarwanda who migrated during the pre-colonial and colonial era, were regarded as refugees, etc.
• Please consider using a more neutral language in some cases: "a force of over 4,000 rebels"
• Consolidate short sections into one, especially if a single sentence makes up a section.
• Make sure that duplications are avoided (for instance, the establishment of palamilitary forces Interahamwe and Impuzamugambi is mentioned twice)

More to come... Borsoka (talk) 17:11, 23 September 2024 (UTC)

• As the nominator is improving the article along the lines reviewers suggested, I think there is no need to add further comments. My impression is that the article is well written and thoroughly researched. Borsoka (talk) 03:38, 7 November 2024 (UTC)