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German Jewish military personnel of World War II

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would welcome insights from other editors.

Thanks, McPhail (talk) 17:59, 9 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I would say this article is excellent. Well-written, with high-quality sources. I made a few copyediting tweaks and have a few minor suggestions:

The links are probably sufficient, but I might also include translations of/explanations for the various German words (Mischling, Generalfeldmarschall, etc).
The history section is a little long by itself. Could probably stand to be broken up into a few sections.
...it has been suggested that "the existence of this relatively substantial pool of potential soldiers may well have been one of the factors motivating the Nazi leadership to create a special category for half-Jews, thus preserving them for future use as soldiers." — By who?
As Germany's fortunes in the war continued to decline and the treatment of "Mischlinge" became more severe, "some Jews began to flee their battalions and submerge". — What does submerge mean in this case? As in they went underground?
...instructed "German" prisoners to get out. — Genuine question: is there a reason that German is in quotation marks here?
Beyond personnel of Jewish descent serving in the Wehrmacht... including workers in the Wehrmacht enterprises themselves—had been turned over to the [Schutzstaffel]". — This paragraph is a little long. Consider splitting.
Information in the "Notable cases" section should be properly cited, particularly stuff categorized under the "Notes" section that is not mentioned elsewhere in the article.
Especially for books, it is not necessary but probably a good idea to include page numbers for your citations.

You didn't mention it in the Peer Review request, but I think that this article is probably pretty close to meeting the criteria for WP:GA status. I would encourage you to nominate it if you feel like you have the time/energy. Great work! Spookyaki (talk) 22:16, 18 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much, that is all very useful. I will work through this feedback. McPhail (talk) 23:08, 4 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]