Wikipedia:Peer review/Dominican amber/archive1
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I believe it is an important article worthy of being investigated and reviewed by people who know more than I do and can help improve it if need be.
Thanks, The Singularity (talk) 14:13, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfsich comments: This is interesting and what is there seems fairly detailed, plus the images are very nice. Here are some suggestions for further improvement:
- A model article is often useful for ideas and to follow for style, refs, etc. One possibility is Oil shale, which is an FA.
- The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article - nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself (Baltic amber, for example). My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way, so the lead needs to be expanded. Please see WP:LEAD
- Avoid one sentence paragraphs - they are too choppy and break the flow of the article. Expand or combine with others
- Provide context to the reader - for example, give the years for the Miocene and Oligocene. Or say the amber comes from a tree in the lead, or give the full name of Santiago. See WP:PCR
- Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase, no space between punctuation and ref either - so fix According to Poinar,[1] Dominican amber dates from Oligocene to Miocene. (ref at end)
- Article needs a copyedit and more refs - for example The La Cumbre, La Toca, Palo Quemado, La Bucara, and Los Cacaos mining sites in the Cordillera Septentrional not far from Santiago. [3]There is also amber in the south-eastern Bayaguana/Sabana de la Mar area. There is also copal found with only an age of 15-17 million years. First "sentence" is a fragment (no verb), ref should follow the period with a space after "...Santiago.[3] There..." and the copal sentence needs a ref.
- My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Avoid needless repetition - sites of mines are in article twice.
- Avoid overlinking - amber does not need to be linked twice in one paragraph
- Images should not sandwich text between them - see WP:MOS#Images
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:32, 26 May 2008 (UTC)