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Devoured by the Mouth of Hell

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I've listed this article for peer review because... look for copyediting, sentences and words that don't make sense, any signs of jank, other errors i missed or whatever. my writing's been kinda bad lately so critique as you may. GA attempt.

Thanks, Chchcheckit (talk) 20:39, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

should i just nominate this again since it's flagged as "answered" or. Chchcheckit (talk) 12:50, 1 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

No, you should review some requests and other editors will recognize you as well. dxneo (talk) 13:45, 1 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Chchcheckit! Some comments on the article. From a person with zero knowledge on the topic, I can say it's informative, and I find no major errors in your article. Some suggestions if you'd like this article improved further:

Following the release of its third extended play Profound Morality (2022) the band began working on the album and wrote an early version of the album in March 2023. I think the phrase "on/of the album" repeats awkwardly.
five-date headlining tour of the United Kingdom... Unless five-date specific for British English or has a distinct meaning, I find "five-day headlining tour in the United Kingdom" more understandable
You may refer to MOS:SEASONS for unambiguifying which months are "summer".
Add alt captions for images, especially the cover art. I recommend adding lyric subtitles to the audio samples - I tried adding one for "Siege Lord", though timestamps might be inaccurate since I didn't use Audacity to pinpoint milliseconds.
Century Media released the album in all formats worldwide on 27 September 2024. You may clarify the phrase "all formats".

I might extend this list when I detect other errors in copy editing. Feel free to ask for any clarifications, and good luck! RFNirmala (talk) 12:02, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. // Chchcheckit (talk) 12:28, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@RFNirmala also dw you got the siege lord subtitles on point. i didnt realise but got excited ngl // Chchcheckit (talk) 12:30, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! Saw your copy edits. They're good for the article, still, some of the points I raised aren't yet resolved. If you'd like any help on how to do so, ping me and I can resolve it with you.

By the way, for describing the lyrics, "Lashed" has to be included in the main prose, and should have subtitles (if the song does have lyrics).

RFNirmala (talk) 23:06, 4 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Chchcheckit! A follow-up. I can't give verdicts on details on the album itself - so you can add/reduce content as you see necessary, best if you add edit summaries.

My main concerns are MOS:SEASONS, the "Lashed" subtitle file, and the alt images. These would be the points a GA reviewer would raise in a GAN. I believe this article is ready for GAN with a few comments. RFNirmala (talk) 02:39, 7 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I’m still getting to that, but thank you for your comments!! // Chchcheckit (talk) 11:54, 7 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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I have added this PR to the FAC PR review sidebar. Please consider reviewing articles listed there. Thanks, Z1720 (talk) 03:05, 30 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Z1720, why add it to the FAC sidebar when the nominator is going for GA not FA? dxneo (talk) 09:48, 30 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Dxneo: Whoops, you are correct. Sorry about that. I'll remove this. Z1720 (talk) 15:07, 30 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]