Wikipedia:Peer review/Black Ken/archive1

Black Ken

I've listed this article for peer review because I have significantly improved it recently, and would like to nominate it for FA in the future. This is my first peer review, and I look forward to getting feedback on my work.

Thanks -- CarbonLollipop talk┊contribs 03:45, 22 December 2024 (UTC)

Dxneo

Hello, thank you for your hard work on the article. I'll also try to help with constructive comments and suggestions, feel free to raise your concerns when you disagree. By the way, I have an article at WP:GAC, "Water" awaiting reviewal, please consider reviewing it.

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• Was it the first Mixtape, second or third?
• The mixtape was self-produced by Lil B ==> It was self-produced by Lil B
• with the release of singles and a 26-track preview to DatPiff. — is it "to" or "on"?
• Over seven years later, on August 17, 2017, Lil B self-released the mixtape. ==> It was self-released on August 17, 2017
  • Please consider moving up this sentence. Maybe phrase it like "Black Ken is a mixtape by American rapper Lil B. It was self-released on August 17, 2017. Black Ken was produced by Lil B, and was dedicated to Diddy, Lil Yachty, Lil Uzi Vert, among others. It was first announced in 2010, with the release of singles and a 26-track preview to DatPiff."
• Martin Shkreli, who had purchased Wu-Tang Clan's album Once Upon a Time in Shaolin (2015), expressed interest in purchasing the mixtape, and received a positive response from Lil B. The next month, Lil B released the song "My House" in collaboration with producer Metro Boomin as a single for Black Ken, though it was not featured on the mixtape. — not sure why this was included in the lead. And if Metro Booming was featured on the album, why isn't he also mentioned as the producer?
• Any reason why you only quoted The Wire in the lead? I honestly don't think the quote is necessary.
• Black Ken consists of 27 tracks, and contains one feature from rapper ILoveMakonnen.

I've only went through the lead and that's all I got for now. I will be back for more. dxneo (talk) 09:01, 23 December 2024 (UTC)

Hi, thank you for taking a look at the lead, I'll definitely consider reviewing your GAN.

Was it the first Mixtape, second or third?

Black Ken is Lil B's 51st mixtape, and this is mentioned in the "Background and release" section. I personally think that saying "a mixtape" in the first sentence of the lead is appropriate due to the size of his discography. Other articles such as 05 Fuck Em and Hoop Life also do this.

is it "to" or "on"?

 Done, changed to "to" in Background and release

Please consider moving up this sentence.

 Done and rephrased

not sure why this was included in the lead

Shkreli's attempted purchase of the mixtape as well as the single "My House" were covered extensively, so I think they deserve a mention in the lead.

why isn't he also mentioned as the producer?

Sorry, but I'm not sure what you mean by this. "My House" didn't end up on the mixtape.

Any reason why you only quoted The Wire in the lead?

Berkeley is a city that's on the West Coast, which supports the statement from earlier on in the sentence. I see now that this may be unclear for people that don't know that. I'll consider clarifying.

Black Ken consists of 27 tracks ...

 Done

CarbonLollipop talk┊contribs 11:01, 23 December 2024 (UTC)