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Bejeweled (video game)

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As an introduction, Bejeweled is the very first game developed and released by PopCap Games. It was heavily influential in the casual games industry, being a major reason for its success and an inspiration for future match-three games. I am preparing this article for a potential future FAC. If all goes well, this article might be able to be featured on the front page for the 25th anniversary of its retail release.

Thanks, Lazman321 (talk) 20:04, 3 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

TWOrantula

Ahh, the match-three game that started it all. Unfortunately, I'm too young to remember it, but I'm happy to review this article for FA status! TWOrantula^TM (enter the web) 15:59, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@TrademarkedTWOrantula: Hey it's been a week. Any update on your review? I'm not trying to rush you, I understand you have school. Lazman321 (talk) 04:37, 20 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Unfortunately, no. I am occupied with school at the moment, but I will get to you soon. TWOrantula^TM (enter the web) 16:04, 20 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Lazman321: Done! TWOrantula^TM (enter the web) 01:56, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@TrademarkedTWOrantula: Thank you for your review. I have edited the article with your comments in mind, with more planned. To address your question regarding the rationale behind the retail price, Tomlison is saying that "cheap implies bad to consumers", not "cheap = bad". Lazman321 (talk) 04:24, 25 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

JAMDAT's Bejeweled Multiplayer includes an additional multiplayer mode, in which opponents compete in timed one-on-one matches. - Shouldn't the infobox mention that the game is also in multiplayer even though this is just for a specific port of the game?
During these matches, players can use special gems to affect their opponent's gameplay such as through bombs. - I assume the bombs are the "special gems"? Isn't the correct term "power-up"?
which was reportedly primitive - Would recommend quoting the original source to maintain NPOV, and "reportedly" is a word to watch out for
Cut "geometric" in "geometric gems"?
a cheap price would imply an inferior product - Is he essentially saying that "cheap is bad"?
Would recommend adding a collapsible list template to the infobox for release dates
PopCap CEO David Roberts estimated in May 2010 that 70 percent of players of Bejeweled across its various platforms were women. - I feel like this is trivial information that shouldn't be included.
"lack of skill" -> "simplicity"?
The market of match-three games following Bejeweled has become saturated - Doesn't sound neutral. Would recommend cutting this phrase and directly stating that there are over 2000 match-three games.
The prose isn't shabby and is quite readable. Overall a high-quality article that has a high chance of becoming a featured article!

David Fuchs

Hey, bug me if I haven't showed up with comments in a week or two. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 17:43, 14 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@David Fuchs: Bugging you now, as it has been a week. Any updates? Lazman321 (talk) 16:08, 21 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@David Fuchs: Just to let you know, pending any further discussion, I will be closing this peer review in a week. If you'd like to provide a review now, you're welcome to and it would be much appreciated, though I understand if you are unable to. Lazman321 (talk) 23:50, 1 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Vacant0

Definitely a long-time fan of the series. I'll take a look at the article's references in the next few days. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 13:31, 17 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Vacant0: I want to say thank you for your prompt review. I will edit the article to address your points. As for the GA Review, I have no idea why ProtoDrake didn't provide a spot-check. I asked him if he could do one, but he seemed to misinterpret my request. Lazman321 (talk) 18:30, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

By the way, to address your concerns over the reliability of some sources: DemiVision is a primary source, as it had been acquired by JAMDAT by the time Bejeweled Multiplayer was released; Wireless Gaming Review is a case of WP:USEBYOTHERS by The New York Times, GameSpot, and Game Studies, and it's only being used to support the specific platforms this version was released on; and I can just remove the MacDailyNews source as the information it supports is already supported by the IGN source. Lazman321 (talk) 18:45, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Once you get it at FAC, feel free to ping me and I'll take a deeper look at the article. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 17:18, 21 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The style of reference titles is currently inconsistent. It is recommended to have all titles use title case capitalization.
I won't do a spotcheck, but rather only check the reliability of references (both of which were supposed to be done in the GA review, but there is no indication of this).
Ref 14 is paywalled. Use the |url-access= parameter to indicate this.
There are several primary sources (PopCap, Astraware), which is fine.
I'm unsure about the reliability of DemiVision, Wireless Gaming Review, and MacDailyNews. The rest, including the two books, are reliable.