Wikipedia:Peer review/Ballymacarrett rail crash/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it is fairly complete. However, there is only one newspaper used as a reference (only one from the area readily available). I welcome all general comments!
Thanks, Arg342 (talk) 00:51, 27 July 2016 (UTC)
I'll add notes here as I go through the article; it might take me a day or two to complete the review. You don't say whether you're planning to take this to GA, but I'll point out anything I see that I think would be an issue for a GA nomination. Please feel free to revert my copyedits if I mess anything up -- I don't know much about trains so may make some obvious mistakes.
- No citations on the second paragraph of the "Background" section, or on the second paragraph of the Ministry of Commerce investigation section.
- What does "bunker first" mean? Maybe "bunker" could be linked to an appropriate article?
- Why "so-called" railmotor? It's a standard term, isn't it?
- If the railmotor is being pushed, then presumably the driver is at the back, but then you say the lead car has the driver in it, so I'm confused about which is right.
- Any chance of a map, showing the station, Ballymacarett Junction, The Oval, and the location of the collision, and anything else close enough to be useful in the description -- perhaps Victoria Park station?
- There are a couple of technical terms that could use some inline explanation to make it easier to read -- I had to click through to find out what a "block" was; same for "interlocking" and "outer home signal".
- I linked "Inspector of Railways" to Her Majesty's Railway Inspectorate; not sure if there's a better target.
- Generally I think the prose is a little weak; there's nothing glaring, but it could do with a copyedit and polish if you plan to take it to GA. If you'd like more specific details on the prose I can give you some examples.
- Searching for sources, I see a few that might be relevant -- have you been able to consult these?
- Rail Versus Road in Ireland, 1900-2000, by Michael Collins
- Steam Over Belfast Lough, by Robert Arnold
- Broken Rails, by Brian Aongusa
- The Belfast & County Down Railway, by Edward Patterson
The article seems well-structured, with the sections I'd expect, and it covers the ground fairly well. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 00:51, 8 August 2016 (UTC)
Query: @Arg342: G'day, this review seems to have come to a natural conclusion as there haven't been any edits since August 2016, do you wish for me to close it and archive it? The bot that removes it from the PR page appears to be down, but I believe I can manually complete the bot steps. Please let me know your intentions. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 04:03, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
@AustralianRupert: That will be fine, thank you. I will need to know where to find the archived version, since I still need to address the issues. I just got a hold of several reference books that should help me; now I just have to find the time! Many thanks, John. --Arg342 (talk) 09:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
- @Arg342: No worries, I've archived it now. You can find the link to this page in this category: Category:January 2017 peer reviews or on the article's talk page. The review will remain on this page, but won't be transcluded on the main PR page. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 09:57, 5 January 2017 (UTC)