User talk:Mariarizwan100/sandbox

Mariam Hanna

I thought the article was informative and detailed for the syndrome.
I thought that the article needed pictures.
Add a research direction section to discuss any previous or ongoing research.
I feel like the signs and symptoms section could be slightly shortened. Some of the information present could have been added to the pathophysiology section.

Unless there is something actively wrong with them, do NOT change the words that were already on the page. Just add new material.
Use wikipedia formatting for headers. This will autopopulate the layout. If you need help with wikipedia, come see me!
Sources need to be cited using wikipedia's citation manager. Don't add links in the text to external sources, just cite them!
Some areas show accidental plagiarism: poor paraphrasing where you just changed some words but didn't really summarize or paraphrase. This is still plagiarism. If you need help understanding how to paraphrase I'm happy to work with you or you can go to the writing center.
You have a lot of good information here! Once you have it properly organized, you will be well on your way
There are a lot of filler words and phrases that don't add to meaning. Keep your material clear and succinct.
There are some relevant images in wikimedia commons that would help with anatomy, symptoms, and/or mechanism. I encourage you to make use of them.
Make sure the language is approachable. Some of this uses unnecessary jargon or is excessively complicated.
Needs some editing for spelling, clarity, and grammar. If you need help with this, I encourage you to go to the writing center!
You don't need to describe the spread or prevention details of the parasites. Just link to those pages. This is true for a number of things that aren't central to your topic.
Missing research directions

The information was informative and engaging as it kept my attention.
Pictures would make this article better. Maybe pictures of normal RBC's and the RBC's of the condition.
I liked how you explained some of the more "sciencey" things which is important for lay people who utilize Wikipedia
Consider shortening the signs and symptoms section and adding a section regarding research.

Good summary of the disease, including its history and prevalence.

Consider adding a brief mention of the diagnostic challenges and treatment approaches in the abstract.

Consider adding a table or chart for better readability

Mentioning gaps in knowledge would've been better

"Research Directions" section is missing

Adding more images or photos would be ideal to enhance visual appeal