User talk:LillianSims13/sandbox

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For the most part, the article is very well written. There are some grammatical errors and spelling errors (the word *that* in the first sentence and *used* in the fourth line down) and some rewording could be done, but overall the article is very good. I would move the sentence “The symbol of Venus a circle with a cross extending in the downwards position that stands for women” to the Origin section of your article to introduce readers to the topic since it is basically describing what the whole article is talking about. You did a good job staying neutral and staying objective. Your sentences are precise and to the point. In the What It Means Today section, you could possibly go into more detail about a handful of other gender symbols as well to add contrast. You could also possibly go deeper into how the symbol is a representation of pride and the groups that made it come to be this way. You have four reliable references for your article, but three out of the four have some type of citation error (note the red text that follows the reference at the bottom of the page). You also do not have any internal or external links located in the actual body of your article. My biggest note is that the article itself is very well written and organized. You definitely can tell you’ve researched this topic and know it well. Some rewording could be done to make the sentences flow a bit easier, but that’s one of the only writing changes I would make Saldri3 (talk) 13:19, 17 March 2016 (UTC)