User talk:Knapolitano60/sandbox
Roche.n (talk) 18:40, 25 October 2016 (UTC) What does the article (or section) do well? I think this article does a great job of explaining the sell side. Even to a reader who may not have a finance background, I think the explanation would allow them to understand the concept regardless of their familiarity with the topic.
What changes would you suggest overall? I think it might be easier to follow if you use subheadings below your headings. For example, possibly 'Roles of Analysts and 'Performance Rankings' under the "Use" heading and 'self-dealing', 'conflicting duties', and 'performance ranking' under the "Conflict of Interest" heading.
What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I think breaking up the article would make it a lot easier to follow for the reader.
Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I really appreciated how well you explained all of your points! I am going to compare my analysis with yours because I think you did an amazing job explaining the concepts.
What does the article (or section) do well?
You did a really nice job of cleaning the original article. It's a lot easier to read than it was before. Each concept you mention is also nicely explained within the article making it easy for those who didn't know anything about the topic to follow.
What changes would you suggest overall? I have a few suggestions that you could improve on. First, I agree with Nikki that it would be helpful if you either broke up your paragraphs a bit or fixed some of the transitions when you switch topics. Second, if you could expand a bit more and give a one sentence summary on self-dealing or the "Chinese-wall" restriction, that would help with the flow of your paper so readers don't get confused. Also, is there anything significant about the time frame of the dot-com bubble and the lawsuits that happened? Are they related or did they just happen around the same time?
What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? Clean up the transitions or add subheadings. It will make the article flow better.
Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I might go back and edit more of my article rather than just edit one section because your overall article flows better than mine currently does. LNS1094 (talk) 01:59, 27 October 2016 (UTC)