User talk:Erikameraz764/sandbox

Cierra Garrett

Nice pictures and the informational table looks great!
Spell check article
When discussing surgery statistics or prognosis percentages, add some real statistics and cite them. Example: 86% of penetrating keratoplasties are successful, the other 14% experience (input complications)
Add a real-life picture of the eye with the disease

CierraGarrett (talk) 01:21, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Julian Estrada

Abstract could benefit from history and prevalence surrounding the topic presented
Siting throughout the Wikipedia article, possible addition of more reliable sources if available
For research directions, could be in need of presenting case studies for this condition/ clinical trials or researchers
Wikipedia article is coherent and well established!

Jestrada18 (talk) 18:20, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Dr. Weiner

Citations should be at the end of the sentence with information from that source, not the beginning.
You have a good start on links, but this would still benefit from more.
Cause: You say certain genes have been linked. What genes?
Every piece of information needs a citation. If you took all the info in a paragraph from one place you can just cite at the end of the paragraph, but no paragraph should be uncited. Some parts are very well cited, some have few or none.
Research needs to address and cite specific articles or current studies.
History missing from abstract.
Needs editing for grammar, clarity, and spelling.
Good use of accessible language in the early parts. It seems like the later parts are unfinished and need work on this.
Consider more pictures for adding context. There are good ones already on wikimedia commons, like this: Cornea#/media/File:Vertical section human cornea-Gray871.png
Good job using wikipedia's tools to structure the article.

Sweiner02 (talk) 02:13, 16 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lauryn Frichtl

Great job structuring the article. The setup looks very eye pleasing.
Hyperlink more words
Add in a picture of the eye
Run through Grammarly/spell check
Add in some more history in the abstract if you can find appropriate information

192.175.17.38 (talk) 19:21, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Wasiya Naaz

The article provides a thorough introduction to sclerocornea, covering its clinical features, pathophysiology, associated conditions, diagnostic methods, and management options, making it a valuable resource for understanding this rare congenital condition.

Improvement suggestions:

Organize the content into clearly labeled sections for better readability. For example, combine redundant content under a single section (e.g., the "Cause" and "Genetic Factors" sections overlap and can be streamlined).

Avoid repetitive statements like “Even though there are some understanding of the genetic and developmental factors, the exact cause is unclear.”

The Research Directions section should specify key advancements and their implications (e.g., success rates of newer immunosuppressants or surgical techniques).

The Epidemiology section is minimal. Consider including known prevalence rates (if available), population-specific insights, or explanations of why comprehensive data is lacking. 2601:249:8700:739:B121:8C72:687A:C34A (talk) 01:37, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]