User:Bellaruby12/Environmental issues in New York City/Jeanius1 Peer Review

Peer review

Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

Guiding questions:

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?
Is the content added up-to-date?
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
Are the sources current?
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
Are images well-captioned?
Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only

If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.

Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
What are the strengths of the content added?
How can the content added be improved?

Examples of good feedback

A good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.

Peer review of "Homemaking"
Peer review of this article about a famous painting

Additional Resources

Check out the Editing Wikipedia PDF for general editing tips and suggestions.

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Bellaruby12, Anaeradze,and Gcuties

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bellaruby12/Environmental_issues_in_New_York_City?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Environmental issues in New York City

Evaluate the drafted changes

**Based on the sandbox and the current article.

* The lead section is not being improve to reflect the new contents that being added.

*The content is relevant to the topic, but in the "Air pollution exposure and risk of violent behavior" section in the article, I would suggest to add a source that can explain how the statistics of how air pollution affect the behavior of someone to be more aggressive, like an article that comparing crime rates and pollution level from one time period to another, to see if there's a correlation.

-In the pest section I think you need a source that can help you back up what you said about the quantity of rats per colony and to add to this section, you can talk about the impact of rats on human life in the subway or you can mention about the rats that were on the news that are in fast food restaurant in NYC. (something related to NYC).

-You need more contents besides talking about pest, noise and air pollution.

- In the noise pollution, you need to explain a bit more. Is there studies that being made that shows noise in the city cause heart disease when compare to the country-side or the rural environment?

*Tone and Balance: when taking about the homeless and garbage, it seem like more of a persuasive statement, but by re-write it, and focus on the facts about these two factors, I think it can great topic to be focused on.

*Source and references: The sources that provided was written by diverse author, but some of the sources need a date check.

*Organization: The content that was added has minor grammatical error--> Ex: in the "Air pollution exposure and risk of violent behavior," I would write it as such: (Air pollution has been linked to violent behavior. A 2019 study reported emerging evidence that air pollution causes aggressive or impulsive reactions in people. The study was designed to estimate the change in violent and nonviolent criminal behavior risk associated with short-term air pollution in U.S. counties. The study used daily monitoring data for ozone from EPA and Federal Bureau of Investigation crime data from 2002 to 2013. The study evaluated the exposure-response relation and assessed differences in risk by community characteristics of poverty, urbanicity, race, and age. The findings suggest that even a slight increase in air pollution can result in violent behavior, regardless of the community type.)

*Images and Media: I didn't see any images added when going through the article's history.

*Overall, I think the topics chosen for this article are significant, you guys need to refine them a bit more and add more information if possible to make it more complete, but besides that, you guys are on your way; good job.