Overall: I congratulate you for getting this to GA status within the past week and would like to see it on the front page. However, I think the hook itself could be better. The hook does describe something interesting, but I would recommend rewording it to be more snappy. Especially since "Nestlé were making" is grammatically incorrect as Nestle is a single entity. Perhaps to make it more concise and thus more enticing to read, cut the second half of the hook starting with "Nestlé were...". Lazman321 (talk) 08:03, 25 November 2024 (UTC)
Comment: Some qualification is needed in the hook unfortunately: 1) The Washington Post article indicates that there is only consensus that Nestlé was responsible for the first commercial white chocolate, not white chocolate generally 2) The South China Morning Post article is not a reliable source for history (seen for example in how it implies Henri Nestlé was alive in 1936) but can be used for the attributed claims of Nestlé. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 08:47, 25 November 2024 (UTC)
ALT1: "... that white chocolate(pictured) has been used as a coating for vitamin products?" seems to solve both concerns I think, Lazman321 and Rollinginhisgrave.--NØ 09:33, 25 November 2024 (UTC)
Essentially resolves my concerns, thanks for the change. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 21:39, 25 November 2024 (UTC)
Thank you. I approve ALT1. Lazman321 (talk) 06:06, 26 November 2024 (UTC)
I congratulate you for getting this to GA status within the past week and would like to see it on the front page. However, I think the hook itself could be better. The hook does describe something interesting, but I would recommend rewording it to be more snappy. Especially since "Nestlé were making" is grammatically incorrect as Nestle is a single entity. Perhaps to make it more concise and thus more enticing to read, cut the second half of the hook starting with "Nestlé were...". Lazman321 (talk) 08:03, 25 November 2024 (UTC)