Template:Did you know nominations/Our Lady of the Immaculate Conception Church, Goa
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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 11:00, 9 April 2015 (UTC)
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Our Lady of the Immaculate Conception Church, Goa
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- ... that the Our Lady of the Immaculate Conception Church, Goa, (pictured) in an impressive wedding cake shape, has its exterior painted in super white colour like a "white toothpaste"?
5x expanded by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 01:20, 6 April 2015 (UTC).
The article appears to meet the expansion criteria, but I'm not sold on the hook. I can't see the "impressive" description in the sources the article uses, and if they do use it then I feel that such a POV statement needs to be attributed clearly to the source in the article text. The sources for the text that forms the basis for the hook are book tourist guides, which perhaps explains the rather flowery language. Could a more factual and less subjective hook be devised? Cordless Larry (talk) 17:56, 7 April 2015 (UTC)
- @Cordless Larry:. Thanks for the review. I have removed the objectionable words in the article. I propose this modified ALT1 hook.--Nvvchar. 01:09, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
- ALT1 hook ... that the Our Lady of the Immaculate Conception Church, Goa, (pictured) built in Baroque architecture is painted in super white colour?
- How about the following? I'm not sure the colour of the paint is that interesting.
- ALT2 hook ... that the Our Lady of the Immaculate Conception Church, Goa, (pictured) is built in Baroque style in the shape of a wedding cake?
- It might also be possible to link to the wedding-cake style article? Cordless Larry (talk) 09:29, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
- @Cordless Larry: ALT2 hook appears to be fine. --Nvvchar. 10:04, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
OK, I'm happy with that hook (though if you want to make it more interesting, you could reword it to "was built in Baroque style in 1609 in the shape of a wedding cake") and the image checks out. Looks good to go to me. Cordless Larry (talk) 10:09, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks. It is fine as approved.--Nvvchar. 10:19, 8 April 2015 (UTC)
