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Mesklin
- ... that Mesklin, the first planet in fiction that was based on a suspected real-world detection of an exoplanet, appeared in 1953?
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Milkrun
- Comment: If you can come up with a way to make the hook snappier, please do.
Improved to Good Article status by TompaDompa (talk).
TompaDompa (talk) 20:38, 15 January 2025 (UTC).
- A bit bloated. How about:
- ALT1:... that novelist Hal Clement created the planet Mesklin based on real-world astronomical data that seemed to indicate the existence of an extrasolar planet? DS (talk) 22:44, 15 January 2025 (UTC)
- I'm not overly attached to ALT0, but I do think it's interesting that this was the first time that it happened and that it was as early as 1953. TompaDompa (talk) 06:10, 16 January 2025 (UTC)
- The problem is that "suspected" in ALT0 feels weird. How about:
- ALT1a:... that novelist Hal Clement created the planet Mesklin based on the real-world suspected detection of an exoplanet in 1953? DS (talk) 18:03, 17 January 2025 (UTC)
- The suspected detection was in 1943, whereas the first appearance of the fictional planet was in 1953. ALT1a doesn't really make that clear. TompaDompa (talk) 18:29, 17 January 2025 (UTC)
- ALT1a:... that novelist Hal Clement created the planet Mesklin based on the real-world suspected detection of an exoplanet in 1953? DS (talk) 18:03, 17 January 2025 (UTC)
- The problem is that "suspected" in ALT0 feels weird. How about:
- I'm not overly attached to ALT0, but I do think it's interesting that this was the first time that it happened and that it was as early as 1953. TompaDompa (talk) 06:10, 16 January 2025 (UTC)
- "The detection was in 1943" feels superfluous to the overall concept, which is that the interesting part here is "the (suspected) exoplanet detection occurred decades earlier than the reader expected", right? It's not "Mesklin was created in 1953", which is the essence of your original hook. So how about:
- ALT1:... that novelist Hal Clement created the planet Mesklin based on real-world astronomical data that seemed to indicate the existence of an extrasolar planet? DS (talk) 22:44, 15 January 2025 (UTC)
ALT1b:... that novelist Hal Clement created the planet Mesklin in 1953 based on the real-world suspected detection of an exoplanet? DS (talk) 19:16, 18 January 2025 (UTC)
- ALT1b works for me. My point was that ALT1a could be interpreted as saying that the suspected detection was in 1953, which is not the case. The interesting part is indeed that "the (suspected) exoplanet detection occurred decades earlier than the reader expected". TompaDompa (talk) 16:13, 19 January 2025 (UTC)