Talk:Wargasm/GA1
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Nominator: Launchballer (talk · contribs) 10:42, 28 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 07:01, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
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@Georgeykiwi, Issan Sumisu, and Launchballer: This article looks pretty good. Some grammar fixes and awkward sentences. One ref needs bolstering, and one is apparently dead due to a large site migration. That's about it. Ping me when addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:49, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.
Copy changes
[edit]Lead
[edit]- The band formed in 2018 Try "was formed"
History
[edit]- At first the pair began writing pop punk songs, and recorded an EP in that style called Sadgasm Remove comma WP:CINS
- They then released "God of War" that November, which was later used as the theme for NXT UK. and They then flew from London to Way's parents' house to write, where they recorded subsequent singles "Spit", "Rage All Over", and "Backyard Bastards"; they released "Spit" in June. These participles attach awkwardly. Try They then released "God of War" that November; it was later used as the theme for NXT UK. and They then flew from London to Way's parents' house to write. There, they recorded subsequent singles "Spit", "Rage All Over", and "Backyard Bastards"; they released "Spit" in June.
- Tweaked. I changed the second "Spit" to the first of these to avoid repetition.--Launchballer 03:40, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- That May, Matlock and Way announced that they had signed to Slowplay and Republic Records, and would release a single, "D.R.I.L.D.O.", and a mixtape, Explicit: The Mixxxtape. Remove comma after Records CINS
- Removed.--Launchballer 03:40, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- They released Explicit in September 2022, which included previous singles... Does September include singles?
- Reworded.--Launchballer 03:40, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
Artistry
[edit]- In October 2023, Dannii Leivers of Metal Hammer described ... the band as "looking like the Wikipedia definition of modern rock stars". If Leivers is talking about the Wikipedia definition, you're the dictionary!
- I intend on nominating this as part of a triple nom with Dead! and Sam Matlock, with one triple hook and three alternatives, and plan on using this for that purpose. I'll review the references when I wake up.--Launchballer 03:40, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- This was just a little compliment. :) Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 19:53, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- I intend on nominating this as part of a triple nom with Dead! and Sam Matlock, with one triple hook and three alternatives, and plan on using this for that purpose. I'll review the references when I wake up.--Launchballer 03:40, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
Sourcing and spot checks
[edit]Reviewed: 21, 28, 34, 55, 56, 65, 72, 89, 105, 108, 114, 116
- [34] is dead, apparently due to a site migration. (You probably can't fix this right now.) What makes Complete Music Update reliable?
- This is a fairly mundane claim and per [1] they have an editor, although I'm unnerved by the lack of an about page.--Launchballer 13:18, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- [56] is just the nominees, not the winners, for the awards. Fix with a second ref here.
- Fixed. I'll take the rest when I'm less tired unless someone else does.--Launchballer 18:16, 9 January 2025 (UTC)
- A few of the Spotify refs are formatted differently than the others.
- No idea why Visual Editor sometimes does that. Fixed.--Launchballer 13:18, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
- Can the ref title for [114] be changed to title case from all caps?
- Changed. I believe this is everything, unless I've misinterpreted the dictionary comment above.--Launchballer 13:18, 10 January 2025 (UTC)
Images
[edit]Both images are libre licensed. Encouragement: Remember your alt text, even if it's just "Refer to caption".