Talk:Temper (film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:01, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

Hi, I should have this to you by tomorrow ☩JAGUAR ☩ 18:01, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

Two quick questions: is there any source that describes this film as an action thriller? If not, I think the genre can simply be action. And the poster, is that the final/most common one? Kailash29792 (talk) 08:33, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

@Kailash29792: The first has been altered to "action film" as its director quotes the same in an interview. And, about the poster, it is the last theatrical release poster and also, i find no need to use a poster featuring Daya (NTR) as a police or with a gun or a police jeep, as the character never takes its profession seriously till the pre climax. Then too, it wears the uniform for only one sequence in the end, for seconds literally. Thus, i felt that i could use a poster featuring both the leads when available. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:47, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

• "by leveraging his capacity as a police and an influential smuggler" - doesn't make sense here, how about as a officer or official?

Rephrased. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "and an honest constable Murthy in the transition of Daya to a sincere police officer" - again this sounds a bit unclear, is Murthy helping Daya in any way or is he helping him become a sincere police officer?

The latter. Rephrased. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• The release dates should typically be in the first paragraph of the lead and not the last, however the lead does not mention anything about what critics thought of it, so if you could expand the last paragraph (by writing more about its reception) then I think this should be OK

Well, i believed the release and reception should be in the same, last paragraph after observing many other GA and FA articles. Even its flow from the second paragraph adheres with the article's structure — the concept, production (other than casting which is mentioned in the first mandatorily), release and reception. I've added about its reception in the lead and it should be okay now. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "They later reconcile and Daya comes to know that Lakshmi has a proof" - no need for "a"

Removed. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "That was stored in a CD which is with Lakshmi now" - on a CD

Rephrased. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "Few stills of the film were leaked online on November 26" - A few still images or "screenshots" might sound more like it? Also, the date format in this sentence is inconsistent with the rest of the article

Rephrased. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "In mid-May 2014, The film's shooting schedules were planned in July 2014" - capital letter here. Also is there any reason why the shooting was pushed back to August?

No idea why it happened. May be a delay in Pre production? I don't know sadly. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "because of disruption in construction of a big police station set because of rains" - would sound better as because of disruption in construction of a large police station set due to rainfall

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• The Music section would benefit from either being expanded slightly or merged, seeing as the Temper (soundtrack) article is quite large you could shift content from there?

Expanded slightly. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 11:02, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "screening rights of the film in entire Europe except United Kingdom" - I would lose entire and reword it to "the United Kingdom". It's mentioned again in the next sentence

Removed entire. Altered the next sentence and i believe it should be okay now. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 11:02, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "other parts of North India and International markets" - international doesn't need to be capitalised

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 11:02, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• Minor, but I noticed some spelling inconsistencies throughout the article (some sections use American English while the rest uses Indian/British English), it won't affact the GA criteria but I can use a script to correct it if you like?

Please do it. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 11:02, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

References

• The toolserver is currently down so I had to check the references manually and found no problems

On hold

This is a thoroughly researched article and is comprehensive which is a good factor for this becoming GA. I noticed a few prose issues that could be addressed without any problems and also the lead could be better organised/summarised. I'll put this on hold until all of the above can be addressed, but please ask me if you have any questions! JAGUAR  10:33, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

Close - promoted

Thank you for the quick improvements, I'm confident that the article now meets the GA criteria thanks for the changes made. The prose is now generally much cleaner and references all check out. Well done! JAGUAR  12:57, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

@Jaguar: Thanks for reviewing the article! Pavanjandhyala (talk) 13:10, 1 May 2015 (UTC)