Talk:Shelby Gem Factory/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 21:18, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Review in progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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This article is being put on a 7-day hold.

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Copy changes

• There are numerous locations in the article that need tense changing to reflect the 2019 closure (e.g. is → was). This is probably the single largest content issue on the page.

History

• Jo Kelly should be Kelley.
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:18, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• Second paragraph could stand to be less choppy.
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:08, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Factory

• Remove the emdash in the second sentence.
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• Comma after "theater"
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• Set off "by then" in commas and then make "off limits" hyphenated
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Gem manufacturing

• Consider combining the second and third sentences.
•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:20, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Other items

• I feel like there is something missing. Why did the factory close? How did the business evolve over the years? I'd love to know that but don't get that from this.
•  Done

• Watch tone in a few places which feels a touch promotional or overly positive.
•  Done

• Earwig mostly catches quotes in the article.
•  Done

• Practically every reference is archived.
•  Done

• Lots of great photos (some taken by Kelley in 2003!) which are all suitable for use. Some images do need alt tags.
•  Done

Comments

• @Sammi Brie: Thanks for review. I'll start working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:21, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
• @Sammi Brie: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:43, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• @Doug Coldwell: Almost there (made a few minor cleanup changes). This sentence I'd excise for tone: The factory's FAQ said "our rubies and sapphires are really ruby and sapphire!" Ping me when that is removed and I think this can be promoted. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:28, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• @Sammi Brie: =  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:35, 9 January 2022 (UTC)