Talk:Senghenydd colliery disaster/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 09:25, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Reviewing shortly.♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:26, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Lede

• Perhaps "The explosion killed 439 miners and 1 rescuer; it is the worst mining accident in the United Kingdom" wold read better as "The explosion, which killed 439 miners and 1 rescuer, is the worst mining accident in the United Kingdom".
• " Many of the collieries in field" -in the field?
• What is " signalling gear"?
• "which was to the dead of both the 1901 and 1913 explosions." -"was to the dead" a tad awkward, can this be reworded?
• "In October 2013, on the centenary of the tragedy, a Welsh national memorial to all mine disasters was unveiled at the former pit head, depicting a rescue worker coming to the aid of one of the survivors of the explosion." -was there one man who made it worth mentioning or were there several?

• There was one sculptor, but I'm not sure his name is lead-worthy. All the remainder in this section done, per your suggestions. – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Background

• the Welsh coal industry -is there an article worth linking?

• Nope. There probably should be something, given the history of the region. There is some history in the South Wales Coalfield aticle, but we link to that already. - – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Coal industry in Wales is a definite core article and somehow missing!12:21, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

• ""mines notorious for their gassy seams"," -attribute?

• re-worked instead. - – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

• four miles - convert|4|mi for those who now work in kilometres?
• What is a "long ton"?

• An imperial ton. We've linked on the first instance. The others done (except where commented upon. – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

14th Oct

• "At 3:00 am on 14 October 1913 the day firemen descended the pit to conduct the daily checks for gas; they had three hours to complete their investigations. " -check punctuation.

• Not sure what's wrong on this (I don't tend to use the American comma after a date, which is the only thing I can see would work) – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

@SchroCat: it was the lack of comma in "on 14 October 1913 the day firemen descended the pit", something doesn't quite seem right. Is "the day" needed?♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:20, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

• Yes. A "Day Fireman" is a specific role. I can see what you mean tho - I'll add the comma for clarity – SchroCat (talk) 12:24, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

• Is there an article on "afterdamp"? It would be good to learn more about that, not in this article of course but in another article.

• Yes: now linked (thought I'd done that already!) – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Rescue

• "three-quarters of a mile " -convert

• Done – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Aftermath

• "although he was described by the Duckhams as "undoubtedly a highly capable manager",[46] " -check punctuation
• "A stage play based on the disaster, by journalist and broadcaster Margaret Coles, was first performed at the Sherman Cymru, Cardiff." -when was this?
• "was unveiled at the former pit head. " -is it possible you could recamp on where that is exactly, perhaps a coordinate link in footnotes would help. I'd want to see exactly where it is on google maps.

• All done, bar the last point. I'll try and find an RS to provide the link

@SchroCat: Review done, looks in good shape!♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:34, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks Dr. Blofeld. All done and dusted bar the final point. I'll have a dig around to try and find the exact coordinates, and an RS to accompany it. Cheers - – SchroCat (talk) 11:51, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

• Having said that, the exact coordinates are in the top right of the article - about the lead image. Do you want them copied into a footnote too? – SchroCat (talk) 11:53, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Ah if it's in the exact location, don't worry then. ♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:17, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail: ♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:25, 14 March 2016 (UTC)