Talk:Replanting Family Tree/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:47, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This is the oldest albums GAN unreviewed, so I will take it on; aiming to have as many GANs as possible from the previous month or older wiped out! --K. Peake 08:47, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Change type to EP / Remix album in the infobox; see 4: The Remix as a guideline
"on 18 September 2019 through" → "on 18 September 2019, through"
"It is the companion EP to" → "The EP is the companion release to"
Note the release year of the album either in brackets or using wording relevant to the previous sentence's mention of 2019
"The EP contains four remixes" → "The former contains four remixes"
"as a bonus track, co-written by the EP's sole producer," → "as a bonus track on it, co-written by the sole producer," with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT and you need to mention this in the body because the iTunes sources back it up
"it was distributed" → "the remix was distributed"
"were described as electropop tracks and are complete reworks of their" → "are electropop tracks and completely rework their"
Remove the generally favourable part because only two reviews of the EP are included; change to mentioning it being included on Winkel's list

Background and release

I have no issues with Oh Land being wikilinked here because she is one of two artists who collaborated on this album
The name of Oh Land's husband is not mentioned by either of the sources
"and a shift in sound for" → "and a shift in sound and tempo for" since the source offers a mention of this
"The album was officially announced" → "It was officially announced" because the preceding sentence ends with the album and the succeeding one starts with those words
"singles, and Oh Land embarked on a" → "singles as well as Oh Land embarking on a supporting" with the target
The tour is not sourced so try to back it up and remove "in support of Family Tree" once the above wording has been implemented to avoid repetition
"and created by" → "which was created by"
"Ultimately, The EP was" → "Ultimately, it was"
"on 18 September 2019 through" → "on 18 September 2019, through"
"to digital retailers." → "to digital retailers in various countries."
"of the E{," → "of the EP,"
"Replanting Family Tree, and" → "Replanting Family Tree and"
"In the US, the remix" → "In the United States, the remix"
"created by American musician Arthur Moon," → "created by Moon," because you have already mentioned his full name and he was introduced in the lead
It is not backed up by any of the iTunes sources that the song was originally intended for the album and you should mention that it is a bonus track at this point

Music and songs

Img looks good!
Remove target on remix
River Beats's → River Beats', as this is how apostrophes work when words end in s
The "electronic-heavy production" part is not sourced; only "Salt" is mentioned as electro
"explained the project's concept:" → "explained the concept:" to avoid useless repetition
"contains with four remixes of" → "contains four remixes of"
""Human Error", and" → ""Human Error" and"
Target synth to Synthesizer
"The EP proceeds with" → "Replanting Family Tree proceeds with"
"just over 2 minutes" → "just over two minutes" per MOS:NUM
"On the parent album, Bartlett" → "On Family Tree, Bartlett"
Keep the part about the remix being stripped down but move the premiere info to background and release for focus
"as an ambient pop song" → "as an ambient pop remix" because it is talking about that version, not the original

Critical reception

Remove the opening sentence since there are not enough reviews to back that info up
"Keith awarded the EP a perfect 5 star rating, calling it a" → "Keith called the EP a" because the rating is in the box and you can add more of this review from the last para of the source

Track listing

You should use a different ref for the track listing to start with, then list "When a Hawk Comes By" as a bonus track using the Spotify ref

Would my addition of "Bonus Track" to the note parameter suffice? See [1]. Carbrera (talk) 15:34, 22 February 2021 (UTC).[reply]

Carbrera You should list it as a Spotify bonus track and add that ref in the sub-heading; see Graduation for example (apart from the lack of a ref) and use the other ref at the top of the standard track listing. --K. Peake 15:50, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think I understand why this is necessary, as while "When a Hawk Comes By" is referred to as a bonus track, it appears on all editions of the album, and not just Spotify. Carbrera (talk) 00:03, 25 February 2021 (UTC).[reply]

Credits and personnel

Good

Release history

Good

Notes

Good

References

Copyvio score looks decent at 35.9%
Once again, you are on top with the archiving and there are no issues with the layout either this time!

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but this is definitely in good shape for a EP article! --K. Peake 10:55, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake – thank you very much for another GA review. I believe I have addressed all of your comments within my edits. I would like to apologize for the some of the lazy edits I made that you had to point out. I need to be more careful. Thanks again, Carbrera (talk) 00:14, 25 February 2021 (UTC).[reply]

Carbrera Good that you can learn from your mistakes as well as recognize them vocally, but you are correct about the track listing; I just did not know it was listed that way initially. ✓ Pass now, did some slight copy editing to improve the lead prose though! --K. Peake 07:33, 25 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]