Talk:Puhoy

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:53, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Gen. Quon (Talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 01:53, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn (voiced by Jeremy Shada), a human boy, and his best friend and adoptive brother Jake ... he receives a call from Flame Princess, reaffirming their relationship." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and storyboarded by Tom Herpich ... Wallace Shawn as Rasheeta." & "The appearance of Finn as an adult was based on Howard Keel's character from the 1954 musical Seven Brides for Seven Brothers, which is a favorite of episode co-storyboarder Wolfhard." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 3: Reception "It originally aired on Cartoon Network on April 8, 2013." & "The episode was viewed by 2.75 million viewers ... making it the series' first Emmy win." (not a concise summary of the Reception section) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn (voiced by Jeremy Shada), a human boy, and his best friend and adoptive brother Jake ... he receives a call from Flame Princess, reaffirming their relationship." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and storyboarded by Tom Herpich ... Wallace Shawn as Rasheeta." & "The appearance of Finn as an adult was based on Howard Keel's character from the 1954 musical Seven Brides for Seven Brothers, which is a favorite of episode co-storyboarder Wolfhard." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Reception "It originally aired on Cartoon Network on April 8, 2013." & "The episode was viewed by 2.75 million viewers ... making it the series' first Emmy win." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done "Puhoy" is the sixteenth episode of the fifth season of the American animated television series Adventure Time. Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER) Fix "For his work on the episode, former lead character designer Andy Ristaino won an Emmy Award for "Outstanding Individual Achievement In Animation" for his character designs, making it the series' first Emmy win" in the Reception section. Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None Check for Links to sister projects: None Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done "badass".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "He might go on a lot of adventures as a kid, but !Adult Finn is badass.") Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
None Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other GAs)

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Cross-checked with other GAs: Adventure Time, Adventure Time (pilot), Adventure Time (season 1), Adventure Time (season 2), Adventure Time (season 3), Adventure Time (season 4), Adventure Time (season 5). Referred one pending FL for rough verification - List of Adventure Time episodes. Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: No Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios) Nate Cash & Nick Jennings (directors) (Cartoon Network) Herpich, Tom (Tumblr) Muto, Adam (Formspring) Wolfhard, Steve (Tumblr) Ristaino, Andy (Formspring) Kondolojy, Amanda (Zap2it) Walmart Sava, Oliver (The Onion) O'Boyle, Collin (Geek Smash) Frederator Weisman, Jon (Penske Business Media) Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios) Nate Cash & Nick Jennings (directors) (Cartoon Network) Tumblr Formspring Tumblr Formspring Zap2it Walmart The Onion (Geek Smash) Frederator Penske Business Media Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:

Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done "fester" (no inline citation) "supervising director" ... [2] (Check on source 2, inaccessible) "Big thanks to [Wallace Shawn] … who I finally got to cast in the show, thus shortening my bucket list."[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "Big thanks to Kent and Pen and Nate, and to secret guest stars J.F., M.S., and last but not least W.S., who I finally got to cast in the show, thus shortening my bucket list. Hope y’all dig it!") "probably my favorite musical".[5] (Check on source 5, successful, "It’s probably my favorite musical, or at least in my top three. It’s genuinely wonderful and it’s so nuts.") "focuses on building character".[9] (Check on source 9, successful, "focuses on building character") "teleport[ing] to … alternate dimension[s]".[9] (Check on source 9, successful, "In that comic, Captain America has been teleported to an alternate dimension ruled by Arnim Zola") "slow down, don't freak out, and communicate."[9] (Check on source 9, successful, "It’s a lesson that all young lovers have to learn at some point: Slow down, don’t freak out, and communicate.") "hilarious" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "it is hilarious (and then touching, all in one episode).") "pretty awesome".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "We get to see Finn as an adult in “Puhoy,” which is pretty awesome.") "Adult Finn" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "He might go on a lot of adventures as a kid, but !Adult Finn is badass.") "pillowy world" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "Finn must come to make a life for himself in this pillowy world, and") "badass".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, as above) (also addressed in WP:F***) Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (NFC with valid FUR)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Lead Image (Puhoy.jpg): This image is a screenshot of a copyrighted television program or station ID. As such, the copyright for it is most likely owned by the company or corporation that produced it. It is believed that the use of a limited number of web-resolution screenshots (1) for identification and critical commentary on the station ID or program and its contents, and (2) on the English-language Wikipedia, hosted on servers in the United States by the non-profit Wikimedia Foundation, qualifies as fair use under United States copyright law. Other use of this image, on Wikipedia or elsewhere, might be copyright infringement. Check for copyright status:  Done (Non-free content) Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):  Done (Yes) Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):  Done (valid) Source (WP:NFCC#4): "Puhoy", an episode from the fifth season of the animated series Adventure Time.(Screenshot from the TV show) Use in article (WP:NFCC#7): Puhoy Purpose of use in article (WP:NFCC#8): To illustrate the character designs in the episode, which resulted in character designer Andy Ristaino winning the series' first Emmy Award. Replaceable?: No. (Since it's a copyrighted character, there are no free alternatives available.) 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Relevant to the article Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):  Done Appropriate & Representative Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done Caption - An adult Finn, surronded by his pillow family. For his character designs in the episode, Andy Ristaino won the series' first Emmy Award. (succinct and informative, spelling error surronded should be surrounded)

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:

• The lead does not provide an accessible overview and does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body.
• Paragraphs should be long enough to develop an idea. Fix short paragraph in the Reception section.
• The caption "An adult Finn, surronded by his ..." has a spelling error, surronded should be surrounded.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm delighted to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! --Seabuckthorn ♥ 22:41, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

How does these edits look? Thanks for the review!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:14, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

It's concise now. Good. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:41, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 03:05, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

--68.199.142.57 (talk) 23:34, 3 June 2014 (UTC) Should this article mention that the plot bears a very strong resemblance to the Star Trek Next Generation episode "The Inner Light": http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Inner_Light_(Star_Trek:_The_Next_Generation)

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If a legitimate source can be found noting the difference, then yes!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:24, 4 June 2014 (UTC)

DMT

Why is there no mention of DMT inspiring this episode? I do not see many other possibilities as this mirrors my experiences. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 173.73.27.207 (talk) 20:14, 16 February 2015 (UTC)