Talk:Party in the U.S.A./GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Candy o32 13:03, 19 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi IpodNano, I will be reviewing "Party in the U.S.A." against the GA criteria for you! Candy o32 13:03, 19 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Issues

The prose seems fine to me. Just a few minor issues, and it should be on its way!

Background

No comma after the but in the first sentence.

Done It has a comma now. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:24, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

Why is the CRIA listed as digital downloads for certs, while RIAA is shipments?

Because the CRIA certification for digital downloads has a different requirement than the physical singles certification. It's different and the source says "Party in the U.S.A." was awarded 4 times digital platinum. While in the RIAA, they are the same. It's a million sales for platinum -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:20, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

Non free images need to be 300x300

O.K. But since it is two images in one, I think it should be acceptable for the image to be the size it currently is. fi you disagree I'll lower the resolution. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:22, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lowered a bit. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:57, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Eh, I'm still weary of it since all together it is still one non-free image, even though it is two stills. Candy o32 21:12, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Isn't its new size suitable? -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 22:06, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Cover versions

Not a big deal, but are there anymore more cover versions that could be noted other than just those two. Just wondering to see if the section could be fleshed out more.

Not that I know of. I'll search for notables ones. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 19:57, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Miscellaneous

Could there be a release history and/or credits and personnel section?

Release histories is not something I think should be added to pages. I would add a personnel section but no other Miley Cyrus song articles have it so it would not be in cohesion. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 20:20, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I would recommend it, I won't push it since it isn't listed in WP:SONGS. 21:12, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

WP:ALTTEXT should be added to images.

Done

Refs 26 is dead.

Done

Composition - "In the verses, she details occurrences, like peers questioning her attire,[15] in Hollywood that cause for her to feel homesick and intimidated." Weird wording between "attire" and "in Hollywood" doesn't make sense.

The attire information is supposed to be an example for the occurrences. Therefore, it is put in commas. I replaced "like" with "such as". Maybe that helps distinguish the relationship between "attire" and "in Hollywood"? -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 20:24, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Much better. Candy o32 21:12, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There are several spots in the chart performance where a comma needs to be placed in between two different ideas. (ex. the sentence about charting on the Pop Songs and Adult Pop Songs).

Done

In music video, "Video conception sprang forward with the idea to resemble the scene in Grease where John Travolta sings "Sandy": in the scene, Travolta exits from a car and walks over to a jungle gym, where he sits on a swing and performs the song as projections are displayed in the background" --> Period after "Sandy", begin new sentence.

Done

"The video won the MuchMusic Video Award for Best International Artist Video and was nominated for the MuchMusic Video Award for People's Choice: Favourite International Video, but lost to Adam Lambert's video for "Whataya Want From Me" at the 2010 MuchMusic Video Awards.[48]." This is a bit awkwardly organized. Mention something like "At the 2010 MuchMusic Awards, the song won the video for...........,but lost out in the category of.....to Adam Lambert's....."

Done

In live performances, "Child psychologist Wendi Fischer told Newsday Cyrus was communicating..." Comma or colon after Newsday.

Done

Track listing need sources.

Done

Ref 77 is messed up.

Done

Begin to work on these fixes, and I'll post some more comments later. Candy o32 12:58, 27 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]