Talk:Not in Love (Crystal Castles song)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Skyshifter (talk · contribs) 22:16, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:16, 10 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Synthpop → Synth-pop with the wikilink in the infobox
I think it would be appropriate to mention the recording process of Smith's vocals that were originally seen as demo vocals, then used
Follow this sentence with one about the composition of the covers
To make the lead more expansive, re-arrange the reception so the sentence about critics calling the album version unexciting is followed up by what they praised about the version with Smith and then start a new sentence for the best songs of 2010s rankings, adding names of publications this included
Remove the Belgium chart mention for the lead because these are Ultratop charts, also mention the certification was in Canada by Music Canada to specify

The reference does not back up the song being originally by Platinum Blonde
"Another press release mentions" → "Another press release mentioned"
Re-invoke [3] at the end of the sentence with Ethan Kath's direct quote
Remove the release year of Crystal Castles from brackets since this needn't be done a second time
"Robert Smith recorded "raw" → "Smith recorded "raw"
"was sung; they decided to keep it" → "was sung and decided to keep the song"
"The Robert Smith version of" → "The Smith version of" although the source says October 25 so shouldn't you use this as the date of announcement?
"and officially released" → "and officially released as a single"
Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
"A music video directed" → "An accompanying music video directed" to be specific

Wikilink Ethan Kath and pipe Robert Smith to Robert Smith (musician) on the audio samples
"the version with Robert Smith." → "the version with Smith."
Beats per Minute → Beats Per Minute and pipe to Beats Per Minute (website); the staff member's name is used in the source so mention here please too

"was generally considered unexciting." → "was generally considered unexciting by critics." and put the refs into order
Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
Beats per Minute → Beats Per Minute and remove pipe to Beats Per Minute (website); the staff member's name is used in the source so mention here please with the last name this time
"and that it "sounds the way" → "and sounding "the way"
"said that this track" → "said that the track"

Mention this was the staff of Fact
To avoid overquoting, put the last part of Dombal's quote into your own words as something like "one of Crystal Castles' catchiest works"
"and "Once again, Kath and Glass spun aesthetic" → "as Kath and Glass manage to spin "aesthetic" per above – re-invoke the ref at the end of this sentence too per direct quoting
"ages" while providing a" → "ages", while providing a"
Put some of Molly Beauchemin's quote into your own words to avoid overquote
"described it as the" → "described the song as the"

Regarding the lists, rather than mentioning so many in the first sentence I would only mention any notable rankings like the highest few in prose
Beats per Minute → Beats Per Minute and pipe to Beats Per Minute (website)

Create this section because the positions need to be written out in prose to be in the lead

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Copyvio score shows violation possible for the Pitchfork decade ranking so cutting down on the direct quoting should fix this
UnderTheRadar → Under the Radar and pipe to Under the Radar (magazine) on ref 3
Beats per Minute → Beats Per Minute and pipe to Beats Per Minute (website) on ref 14

On hold until all of the issues are fixed after knocking this review out! --K. Peake 20:26, 10 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]