Talk:Night of Desirable Objects/GA1
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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 10:15, 23 June 2011 (UTC)
Comments
[edit]Plot
[edit]- Walter should be wiki-linked the first time the character is mentioned.
Production
[edit]Nothing here
Reception
[edit]Reviews
[edit]- "A.V. Club" should be "The A.V. Club".
- "writing that despite its 'the relative insignificance'" Remove "the".
- "MTV's Josh Wigler thought the episode mystery" Should be "episode's mystery".
- "and he wished that more time had been focused on this." "He" is redundant.
Lead
[edit]Image caption needs punctuation.
In conclusion
[edit]This article is very close to GA. I'll put it on hold for seven days so that you can make the minor fixes needed. Good luck! Queenieacoustic (talk) 10:15, 23 June 2011 (UTC)
- I made most of your suggested changes. The screenshot caption does not need a period per MOS, as it is an image caption and incomplete sentence (can't find the exact policy now but I will if you need to see it). Thanks very much for the review! One of these days I'm going to make a dent in your own GAN pile. Ruby2010 comment! 13:59, 23 June 2011 (UTC)
- Well done! Passed. Queenieacoustic (talk) 16:49, 23 June 2011 (UTC)