Talk:Ni no Kuni: Dominion of the Dark Djinn/GA1

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 15:09, 4 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do this. If I'm not back in three days, ping me. --ProtoDrake (talk) 15:09, 4 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Review

It's generally alright. Just a few things that jumped out at me on a read-through.

The lead says that it began development in 2008, but I don't see any other mention of this information in the main body of the article.
"Ni no Kuni: Dominion of the Dark Djinn is a role-playing game that uses a third-person perspective." - Some clarification on how the camera behaves (such as whether it remains static or follows the character) would be nice, if possible.
In the gameplay section (this is entirely optional), the screenshot shows a three-member battle party: is it limited to three interchangeable characters, or do you need one human character in battle? A little more specification would be useful here if possible.
"As they enlist the sages' help, they learn of a wand known that could..." - The name of the wand appears to be missing. If it doesn't have a name, or the name is difficult to include in some way, you can just cut out "known".
In the "Sales" section, the phrase "the game had sold" is repeated quite a few times. Maybe alter things a little to provide variety.

That's all I really saw that made me pause. Otherwise, it's a good GA-level article. Putting this on hold until the issues are sorted. --ProtoDrake (talk) 15:39, 5 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, ProtoDrake! I always appreciate your suggestions, particularly with a topic like this. I've gone through and tried to fix your concerns. Let me know if there's anything else. – Rhain1999 ^{(talk to me)} 08:02, 6 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

That was really all I saw. I think this can pass. Good job.

--ProtoDrake (talk) 08:52, 6 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]