Talk:Mohammad Shah Qajar/GA2

GA Review

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Nominator: Amir Ghandi (talk · contribs) 18:00, 9 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Matarisvan (talk · contribs) 07:10, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Amir Ghandi, I will be reviewing this one. This will be my first GA review so please excuse any mistakes I may make. As I see it, on my first read through, the article is comprehensive and the sourcing is good. However, the copy editing issues identified by AirshipJungleman29 in the previous GA review are still present. I can note these down here and I will fix the small ones myself, if that is ok with you. In the last review you said you didn't have the time to do the copyediting, so please let me know if that is still the case now, and I will do all the edits myself since I believe the article is too important and comprehensive to be failed for a few pending copy edits.

Also, I am amazed that this article had been nominated on 9 April but hasn't been reviewed so far. I will try to wrap this one up quickly if you're up for that pace. Matarisvan (talk) 07:10, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, @Matarisvan. I will be able to copy edit the article. Amir Ghandi (talk) 08:55, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Amir Ghandi, my suggestions:

Prose review

"Ottoman governor of Baghdad": Link Baghdad to Baghdad Eyalet?
In the infobox, clarify that the Fatima Masumeh Shrine is in Qom?
"buried in Fatima Masumeh Shrine": "buried at the Fatima Masumeh Shrine" might be better grammatically, consider changing in both the lead and body.
"in 1795, while Agha Mohammad Khan": "when" might be better instead of "while".
Link "Russian army" on first mention to "Imperial Russian Army"?
"(then called Baba Khan)": seems irrelevant here, would be better placed in the Fath-Ali Shah article.
"and overshadowed Iranian pride": seems unnecessary and unclear, consider removing?
Link to Tabriz in the Childhood subsection?
Link to Mashhad in the Early military career subsection?
Link to Kerman on first mention instead of second?
- All done
Link John McNeill to John McNeill (diplomat)?
- I have already linked it
Add the inflation template for Shafti's 2.5 million francs?
- Done
Link Safavid to Safavid Empire?
- done
Link blasphemy to Blasphemy in Islam?
- done

I did the little copy edits myself. Completed upto the Second Treaty of Erzurum section, will resume from there tomorrow. Cheers Matarisvan (talk) 15:48, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

Though not a GA requirement, consider adding alts for the images. I think you want to take the article to FA and alts are necessary there per MOS. Matarisvan (talk) 15:48, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]