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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 08:13, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Nice to see a bird again. Will start soon!

  • Caribbean birds occasionally wander north to warm southern Gulf Stream waters off the eastern seaboard of the United States. – lacks a source
added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:06, 8 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would suggest to combine the second to fourth paragraphs in "Distribution and habitat" to a single paragraph to make it less cluttered. Combining appears to make sense as all are about vagrancy. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 08:13, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I now have 3 paras - 1 for each ocean Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:06, 8 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • I suggest to link "serrations" and "cephalopods" for comprehensibility.
done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:56, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "making landing call as he lands" – Not sure if this is a typo; "making a landing call" or "making landing calls"?
a typo/the former. tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:56, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "It make cock its tail" – do not understand the "make" here, but maybe its my poor English.
a typo. tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:56, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • The male presents nesting material in a gesture of symbolic nest-building – This is very interesting. As I take from the following, they appear to not use nesting material at all for their actual nest? If so, I would explicitly state that, makes it even more interesting.
I know, weird eh? I added this. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:10, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • After leaving the nest, young birds are dependent on their parents for 3–4 weeks – Here I miss the info at what age young birds do leave the nest!
Whoops, don't know how I missed that. added now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:14, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • 50-60 pairs – this needs a proper dash: 50–60 pairs
done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:56, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • which may impact or breeding success of both subspecies – I don't understand the "or" here grammatically.
a typo. tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:57, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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