Talk:Mario Choque/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:33, 7 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 18:38, 1 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie: Hi! Sorry to leave you hanging. I've been super busy, but I should've let you know I saw the review opened. I see you took the liberty of addressing most notes, already – very kind, thank you! – I'll finish the rest now. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 07:33, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

General suggestion: You haven't touched this page since October. Fresh eyes might find other things to tweak. Everything looks pretty good, though. Ping me when ready. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 18:55, 1 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Agreed. I think the article still generally holds up, but doesn't quite conform to my current citation style. That's more of a personal thing, though, so it shouldn't prevent the article from meeting GA criteria. Krisgabwoosh (talk)

Copy changes

where he also worked as an aid You want "aide" with an E.

Done

low to mid-level should be low- to mid-level

Done

he continued to deliver consulting, for the Oruro Telecommunications Cooperative from 1996 to 2007 and the Remove the comma. Consider "he continued to consult for..." or "he continued to provide consulting to..."

Done

the only party he ever held membership in Avoid ending the sentence in a preposition and try the only party of which he was ever a member. That appositive should be slid up next to the MAS-IPSP name, with 2002 after it.

Replaced

Sourcing and spot checks

Is there a reason that ref [26] is a Blogspot mirror?

From the context, I'm certain that this page was mirrored from a press release on the Senate website, but I haven't been able to track down the original – if it's even archived. Adolfo Mendoza was a senator during this time, so I consider his blogspot reliable and use it when no other option presents itself. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 07:33, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

1: 2011 death of Ancasi in traffic accident. Y
6: Choque nació en un hogar minero. Tras cumplir el servicio militar, estudió economía en la UTO y empezó a trabajar en funciones de baja responsabilidad en la Empresa metalúrgica de Vinto... The location of the UTO and his military service probably justifies the "return".
9: Mention of SENASAG in the personal bio. Y
10: The BID is mentioned in both sources, while Nuevo Estado mentions his title there. Y
23: Choque is not listed among the senators being nominated by the MAS in this 2014 article. Y

I have a question on this, actually. Is a claim by omission considered verifiable? As in, am I generally in the clear if I say "so and so wasn't nominated for reelection" and cite it with a source that includes a list of individuals who were nominated – while not explicitly repeating the claim. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 07:33, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Krisgabwoosh Perhaps rephrase as "was not on the list of candidates nominated"? If you do that, I'll pass this. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:26, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I changed "nominated for reelection" to "listed for reelection", hopefully that should do. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:16, 7 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

No copyvio or close paraphrasing issues.

Images

One CC-BY headshot, as is standard for these articles.

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