Talk:Mail chute/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 20:15, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 04:05, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Many, many copy changes to clean up. However, this is salvageable for GA without a significant retooling. 7-day hold to Doug Coldwell. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:56, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

Lead

Hyphenate "high-rise" as an adjective.

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:46, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"It was"... I'd say "The chute was"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:46, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Un-hyphenate "mail delivery"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:46, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Mailbox as one word

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:46, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"thousands of these mail chute systems" remove "mail chute" here to reduce redundancy in back-to-back sentences

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:46, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"About the same time" to "Beginning at about the same time,"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:46, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Original design

Wikilink Elwood Building (and capitalize the B in Building)

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:50, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comma after 1879

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:50, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

What evolved was a building built-in mail chute. Remove "building" or change to a "a mail chute built into the building".

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:50, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Change "Postal department" to "Post Office Department"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:50, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

He obtained a good feedback so incorporated that into his design of the Elwood building. Awkward sentence. "The feedback obtained was incorporated into his design."

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"ground-floor level" maybe "on the ground floor"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Un-hyphenate "postal-workers"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hyphenate "hand-carry" and make "mailroom" one word

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"local Post Office department" make "local post office"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Change "so then" to "; as a result,"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Don't capitalize "the" in the name of the company

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Change "United States postal service" to "Post Office Department", as the United States Postal Service did not exist under that name until 1971.

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hyphenate "first-floor" as an adjective

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Add a unit conversion for "2 feet 6 inches". Code is attached here: 2 feet 6 inches (76 cm)

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"was to be have" remove the stray "be"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:24, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Reflow this choppy area: In 1905 Automatic Mail Delivery Company of New York City started making mail chutes. Cutler sued for patent infringements and won the case. Cutler Manufacturing Company merged with Automatic Mail Delivery Company and the new company was called Cutler Mail Chute Company.

I'd write, "In 1905, the Automatic Mail Delivery Company of New York City started making chutes; Cutler sued for patent infringement and won the case. The two firms merged as the Cutler Mail Chute Company in 1909."
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:30, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"the Times building" is probably One Times Square if this is 1903–1913

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:36, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Lobby receptacles evolved from simple functional collection receptacles to works of art deco mailboxes Change to "Lobby receptacles evolved from simple functional designs more elaborate works of art in Art Deco and other styles, becoming available in a range of styles and materials". This also replaces the sentence two back of this one.

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:44, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Capitalize "avenue" with the street name "Anderson Avenue"

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:44, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Current use

The first paragraph should be completely retooled. It is choppy and poorly laid out. I also think it belongs at the end of the other section.

There was more than 40,000 letters in 1986 that got stuck in the mail chute system of the McGraw-Hill Building in New York City. New York City district of the United States Postal Service recorded in 1999 the service responded to at least two calls a week to clear mail chutes that were hung up with stuck mail. A widow received a love letter and other letters in 1995 that were stuck and lost in a Cutler mail chute 50 years earlier when they were mailed by her late husband back in 1945. Several postcards and letters mailed 57 years earlier in 1923 were found in 1980 in an old Cutler mail chute at the Wilkes-Barre City Hall where they got stuck and lost at the time they were mailed.

I'd write:

From time to time, mail chute systems could clog. In 1986, more than 40,000 letters were stuck in the chute system of the McGraw-Hill Building in New York City. Some clogs lasted for decades; in 1995, a widow received a love letter and other correspondence that had been caught in a Cutler mail chute 50 years prior, and several items intended to be mailed at the Wilkes-Barre City Hall in Pennsylvania in 1923 were instead discovered in 1980. The New York City district of the United States Postal Service recorded in 1999 the service responded to at least two calls a week to clear mail chutes that were hung up with stuck mail.

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:50, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'd also like to see some material on other countries if possible. There's apparently a Korean drama inspired by a letter that got stuck in a chute in a Canadian hotel ([1]).

Working --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:16, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done Added Popular culture section. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:18, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The caption in the first image and the article are also in disagreement, mentioning an "inactive" chute but saying the ESB still has its chutes. It appears to be the latter ([2]).

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:13, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Other

Spell out "Building" first caption. Wikilink Law Building second caption (and mention Akron, Ohio — with state).

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:12, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

All images need alt text.
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:12, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Earwig finds no issues.

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:12, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

References are archived.

Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:12, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for review. I'll get started on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:38, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Sammi Brie: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:18, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.