Talk:Lead Exposure Elimination Project

Lead Exposure Elimination Project was nominated as a Natural sciences good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (October 22, 2024, reviewed version). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated.

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GA Review

Unsuccessful. IntentionallyDense (talk) 18:42, 22 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

This review is transcluded from Talk:Lead Exposure Elimination Project/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: RegMonkey (talk · contribs) 04:40, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: IntentionallyDense (talk · contribs) 03:06, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this soon. IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:06, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:51, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	See comment below. IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	see comments below. IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2c. it contains no original research.	per above. IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	See comments below. IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:51, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:51, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:51, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	7. Overall assessment.	I'm going to place this on hold in order to give you some time to address everything I commented on. IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:51, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply] Fail because of inactivity. IntentionallyDense (talk) 18:42, 22 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The current lead of this article isn't what I would expect from a GA. I suggest rewriting it so it doesn't need references and expanding it a bit. Wikipedia:How to create and manage a good lead section has lots of great advice for this. IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
LEEP was founded in 2020 by Lucia Coulter, a British physician and former NHS doctor, and Jack Rafferty, a former NGO executive. Your source only says founded by physician Lucia Coulter and nonprofit veteran Jack Rafferty in 2020[1] IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
British physician and former NHS doctor, and Jack Rafferty, a former NGO executive. first time you use an acronym it should be spelt out in full. IntentionallyDense (talk) 17:50, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
among LEEP's first projects was a study of the incidence of lead in paint brands in Malawi. When was this study? IntentionallyDense (talk) 17:50, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
LEEP has replicated its "playbook" of testing, regulation, and enforcement in several other countries. What is this "playbook"? IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:51, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The meeting was called in response to a call for action by USAID administrator Samantha Power, who has highlighted lead exposure as a priority area of focus. What does "priority area of focus" mean? Will there be increased funding or more studies etc.? IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:51, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.