Talk:Lauren Conrad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 21:11, 27 April 2013 (UTC) Okay, I'm going to take this article on. -- Zanimum (talk) 21:11, 27 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This is a fairly solid article. It's fairly tightly written summary of Ms. Conrad's career, focused on the key facts, with a strong footing in reality, as opposed to reality. Very nice lead photo. I've changed a few small things already, mostly just challenges to the content; please feel free to contest any of them.

I'd suggest dropping the reference after the first section. It's widely proven by the rest of the article, so it's not terribly needed.

Done, I'm assuming you mean the one about Laguna Bach High School, so that has been removed.

“After moving to Los Angeles in 2006, Conrad was commissioned her own spin-off television series”: that's confusing wording.

Done, reworded.

Any critical reception to The Lauren Conrad Collection, or sales stats? Anything to provide insight into why it was so finite? Also, that reference was published at the launch of the collection, we need something to prove she ended the line in 2009.

Done, expanded.

Was there any official comment on why the 2010 series wasn't picked up? Just something to close that chapter of her career in the article. Was it ratings? Was it that she was too well adjusted of a reality star for MTV's tastes?

Done, MTV wanted more of her personal life.

The talk page has a comment criticizing the article for glossing over her relationship with Kyle Howard. Is there anyway this can be addressed, without tabloiding up the article too much?

Done, the majority of coverage of their relationship was gossipy, so I added a mention of how he thought being on The Hills would ruin his career and that it was never covered on the show.

Ref 46, most of the books link to the official HarperCollins websites, but this one links to B&N. Is there no official page left? I'd suggest perhaps WorldCat, for a non-commercial link.

Done, several replaced with WorldCat.

I was only really expecting the B&N one to be replaced; the publisher's website did have plot descriptions, which WorldCat lacks. Really, both could coexist. Either way is fine though. -- Zanimum (talk) 20:52, 6 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 51, Is there any other reference for this statement, as “Saralisaa” doesn't sound terribly reliable as a source. I don't personally object, but others might.

Done, replaced.

I also made some adjustments to italicizing in the referencing while I was at it. WikiRedactor (talk) 22:56, 4 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thumbs up so far. -- Zanimum (talk) 20:14, 4 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Impressive updates, very neutral, factual. IMDb claims that she was Choice Reality Star in 2006 and 2007, is that true? Otherwise, it's a pass. -- Zanimum (talk) 20:52, 6 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Funny you mention that, because it was in the article but I couldn't find a reliable source to keep it at the time of the nomination. After a little bit of digging, I found a reference that confirms the awards. Thank you for taking the time to review the page, I appreciate it! WikiRedactor (talk) 20:48, 7 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I've had that happen myself, search forever for a source, find nothing, then suddenly something clicks and you can find it.

Congrats, it's now a GA. Strong showing, WikiRedactor! (I have to admit I'm tempted to take on another of your GANs, since this one was so smooth.) -- Zanimum (talk) 23:05, 7 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! If you ever need a favor, don't hesitate to leave a message on my talk page. WikiRedactor (talk) 21:03, 8 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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