Talk:La Nube/GA1
GA Review
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Nominator: Bsoyka (talk · contribs) 22:08, 13 August 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 04:42, 19 October 2024 (UTC)
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Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.
Solid and needing just some general polish. One question about a reference. Ping when done.
- @Sammi Brie: Thanks for taking the time to review! Responded to everything below. Bsoyka (t • c • g) 04:44, 21 October 2024 (UTC)
Copy changes
[edit]Lead
[edit]- The lead (once I reverted the puffery someone added) is rather short. One or two more sentences about featured exhibits, minimum, would really help.
History
[edit]- Consider level-3 subheaders, maybe one for design and one for construction?
- Combine the "In September 2016" into the first paragraph so it is not a loner.
- Hyphenate "world-class".
- MOS:SEASONS try "early 2019" instead of "spring of 2019".
- Capitalize the T in T-shirt.
- maybe "El Paso Fire Department (EPFD)'s" instead of "El Paso Fire Department's (EPFD)"???
- with a ribbon-cutting ceremony at 10 a.m. followed by a public celebration until 4 p.m. Probably over-detail.
Sourcing and spot checks
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When the city pitched a children’s museum idea to voters in 2012, it estimated the $19 million price tag would mostly be used to build the facility and program some exhibits.
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The proposed El Paso Children's Museum received a $20 million boost from the city to ensure it offers a "world-class" educational experience, but at least one city representative believes even that won't be enough. The $20 million the city voted to issue in debt through certificate of obligation bonds combined with about $20 million in additional funding from a nonprofit partner, EPC Museum, boosts the total project budget to about $60 million. Voters approved $19.5 million in funding for the Children's Museum in 2012, as part of a $473 million quality of life bond package. The Children's Museum was one of three "signature" projects. The other two were a multipurpose arena and a Hispanic Cultural Center.
I don't think this goes to "This decision faced some criticism from the community", but it checks out the rest.
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The team proposed a vaulted museum lifted of the ground, a design made to preserve public space and an interactive garden below.
- 16: Quote checks out.
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The name of the new museum was chosen from a long list of more than 600 submissions by El Pasoans, and it was announced at a ceremony at Aoy Elementary School.
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La Nube will open in early 2023.
Earwig mostly catches one long quote. but nothing else.
Images
[edit]The image is CC-BY-SA 4.0 licensed and permissible under the very limited scope of architectural copyright. The logo is appropriate fair use with NFUR.