Talk:Josh O'Connor/GA1
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Reviewer: Olivaw-Daneel (talk · contribs) 00:19, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
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Interested in taking this on. I'll have comments up in a couple of days. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 00:19, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
- There are a large number of quotes, which per MOS:QUOTE may violate copyright – suggest summarizing/trimming. Also, quotes should not be italicized.
- Earwig detects ~60% similarity to multiple sources. This is mostly due to quotes, but there are also instances of close paraphrasing – see these comparisons to The Guardian and En Primeur.
- In terms of broadness, the article lacks coverage of the critical reception of O'Connor's acting. Most of the quotes are from people he is affiliated to (his director, co-stars or himself); reviews from independent sources such as The Independent or The Guardian are needed. Given the large number of awards he's won, such reviews should be readily available, especially for The Crown.
- Coverage of Gods' Own Country, which appears to be his second-best known work, is also limited. There's no mention of the fact that it's a romantic drama, or that it has gay characters; and based on a quick search, there's no lack of sources. E.g. the BBC, The Guardian, The Telegraph, which term the film the "British Brokeback Mountain" and commend O'Connor's acting.
- For his other work, I think at least the genre should be mentioned (e.g. "the crime drama Lewis", "science fiction show Doctor Who"), and for the more major roles, a description of what it's about.
- There are neutrality issues with titling a section
Artistry
(perhaps change to "Acting style"); with the sentenceHis success in the movie confirmed his place on casting agents' scouting radar as one of those subtle, humble chameleons who can disappear into parts and are dubbed "actor's actors"
, which frames an opinion as fact; and withThe fact that The Crown upholds and validates the monarchy
, which has the same issue.
- His place of birth is not mentioned in the cited source.
- It would be helpful to wikilink the website names in citations, so that it's easy to verify if they are reliable. E.g. Interview Magazine, AnOther, En Primeur.
- What makes the following sources reliable? En Primeur, Grantham Matters, YourTango, 45secondes.fr. (For En Primeur, their FAQ implies some of their content is user-generated, but I'm not sure if that applies to their bio pages.)
- Some instances of clunkiness in the prose: in Early life,
O’Connor has cited his school's drama program as that which helped him live with his dyslexia
; in Critical acclaim with The Crown,saying that it did not excite him thinking he cannot add anything to it
; multiple uses of contractions (see MOS:N'T).
he [...] eventually birthed over 150 lambs
is unfortunate phrasing – suggest changing to "delivered" or "helped birth".
- The lead is a bit too short for an article this size; please expand it to provide an accessible overview of the body (MOS:INTRO).
That's it for a first pass. I'm not sure if these issues are resolvable within the usual timeframe of a GA review, but I'll leave it to the nominator to decide. Placing it 
on hold. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 05:01, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
It's been 10 days and the nominator hasn't responded, so I'm going to have to fail this. I've enjoyed the actor's work and would love to see this be a GA at some point, so best of luck with it. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 06:54, 13 January 2022 (UTC)