Talk:James White (inventor)/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sohom (talk) 14:26, 14 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 02:01, 30 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Sohom Datta (talk · contribs) 14:52, 22 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This has been around in the backlog long enough, I'll take a stab at this. Sohom (talk) 14:52, 22 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Review

600 subscribers -- I don't think subscribers is the right term here.
- Source uses it but yeah it doesn't seem right. Used customers instead. -G
although it is unknown if White was aware of its separate invention by clockmakers, first attested by Joseph Williamson c. 1720. -- This is a bit hard to parse, what does first attested by mean in the context?
- Good point, rephrased a bit. - G
bolstered by cross-Channel transmission -- cross-channel?
- Capitalisation is correct when referring specifically to the English Channel. - G
possibly indicating his acquaintanceship -- Why possibly?
- Source sorta hedges its bets without fully committing. I think this is because he never actually mentioned the Earl Stanhope until later in life. - G
possibly indicating that his parents were Nonconformists. -- Is this backed up by the source, feels like a bit of a stretch to assume this?
- The source makes this claim directly; "No record [of his birth] is found in the Church Baptismal Record there. His parents may have been Nonconformists." - G
It would be usefull to put the things he invented into context with one line explaining what they were. While I do have a background in engineering (CS based tho lol) out-flow radial turbine and single and double helical gears are not things I can immediately conjur up mental pictures for and it takes me a while to parse/figure out what they are.
- I admit I wasn't absolutely sure what some of these are; but I tried my best to elaborate lol. - G
Sources check out
- @Sohom Datta: Sorry it took a while! Does this look good? Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 04:01, 1 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good to me, this is good to go! Sohom (talk) 14:21, 14 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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