Talk:I am Setsuna/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 12:32, 19 July 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 10:38, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be reviewing this article as part of the ongoing GAN backlog drive. --Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 10:38, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Initial comments

• There is unlikely any copright violation in the article. Earwig's Copyvio Detector has reported only 13.8% in similarity.
• There are no cleanup banners, such as those listed at WP:QF, in the article.
• The article is stable.
• No previous GA reviews.

General comments

• Prose, spelling, and grammar checking.
  • "A version for Nintendo Switch..." → "the Nintendo Switch..."
  • "Due to weak market presence..." → "Due to its weak market presence..."
  • "The game released to strong sales, and was..." → "The game was released to strong sales and was..."
  • Optional: Add the oxford comma at "Praise went to its atmosphere, soundtrack, and combat"
  • "In towns, the party can talk with villagers to reveal plot elements, and find treasure chests containing useful items." – second comma is not needed
  • "Various items such as..." → "Various items, such as..."
  • "...for escaping from battle..." → from is not needed
  • "...where the enemy is encountered rather..." → "where the enemy is encountered, rather"
  • "Each time an action is taken, or..." – comma is not needed
  • "On their journey they..." → "On their journey, they"
  • "...and Julienne, descendant..." → "and Julienne, a descendant"
  • "The growing party also come across signs of the monsters' continued attacks undermining..." → "The growing party also comes across signs of the monsters' continued attacks, undermining"
  • "At the heart of the Last Lands, the group are..." → the group is
  • "...her feelings and companionship before..." → and companionship, before
  • "...when faced with the challenges of development the game" → developing
  • "...a wish to have players thinking about where to go" → think
  • "The story's setting, in a land covered by snow..." → "The story's setting, a land covered in snow"
  • "...this theme, alongside evoking..." → alongside is not needed
  • "...which tied into the game's SP battle mechanic" → which is tied...
  • "The game's central themes...was included as part of the callback..." → were included
  • "...Hashimoto was putting relatively little effort in the scenario expecting it not to change..." → into the scenario, expecting it not to change
  • "...based on the gameplay and thematic concepts..." – the is not needed
  • I assume the article is written in American English, so change "emphasise" to "emphasize", "recognisable" to "recognizable", and "summarised" to "summarized"
  • "...all tracks were preformed on solo piano..." → on a solo piano
  • "Hashimoto wanted the score to be deeply melancholic, and able to have..." – remove the comma
  • "...than the game's music album, alongside creating new parts..." → replace alongside with along with
  • "During its promotion, the team were wary of openly referencing Chrono Trigger as that..." → "During its promotion, the team was wary of openly referencing Chrono Trigger, as that"
  • "...was revealed, alongside its release..." → replace alongside with along with
  • "...for full immersion in a gaming world" → the gaming world
  • "...for the West by independent company Dico" → the independent
  • "...docked and handheld mode" → modes
  • "...aesthetic and gameplay design, but" – comma is not needed
  • "...reception for PC, and" – comma is not needed
• Checking whether the article complies with MOS.
  • Optional: Add alt text to images in the article.
  • The article complies with the MOS:LEDE, MOS:LAYOUT, MOS:WTW, and MOS:WAF guidelines. There are no embedded lists within the article, so I am skipping MOS:EMBED.
• Checking refs, verifiability, and whether there is original research.
  • References section with a {{reflist}} template is present in the article.
  • No referencing issues.
  • Atsushi Hashimoto and Kengo Uchibori (as seen in the infobox) are unsourced in the article.
  • Reliability:
    • Per WP:VG/S, Destructoid is a blog site, "some content may be reliable, but only if the author can be established as such." I am unsure whether Kyle MacGregor is an establishedauthor.
    • Winter's End is WP:PRIMARY. It would be better if a non-primary source is used instead, but if there are not such for cited content then it can pass (stay).
    • VGMO ref was written by site staff so it can stay.
  • Please translate foreign-language titles of references to English (use the "|trans-title=" parameter).
  • Spotchecked Ref 2, 3, 5, 6, 8, 9, 11, 13, 15, 18, 19, 20, 21, 25, 26, 27, 30, 35, 40, 43, 45 46, 53, 54, 61–most verify the cited content, see notes below for specific spotchecks. AGF on other citations.
    • Ref 2: no mentions of "an angled top-down perspective", "healing potions", "Fogstone", "Techs".
    • Ref 4: no mentions of "Spritnite crystals", "Cyclone", "Charge", "X-Strike"...
    • Ref 5: no mentions of SNES/Nintendo.
  • Copyvio already checked.
• Checking whether the article is broad in its coverage.
  • Dungeons are mentioned in the Gameplay section, but their purpose is not mentioned in the article. If there are no sources that discuss this, leave it as it is.
  • Expand IP to intellectual property (abbreviation is not used in the article).
• Checking whether the article is presented from an NPOV standpoint.
  • The article meets the criteria and is written in encyclopedic language.
• Checking whether the article is stable.
  • As noted in the initial comments, the article has been stable.
• Checking images.
  • Images are properly licensed.

Final comments

@ProtoDrake: The review will be on hold for a week. Once the issues get addressed, I'll promote the article to GA status. Most of the article is well-sourced, but as noted in the review, some parts of the Gameplay section fail verification, so try to find more sources that back up that content up. --Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 18:29, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

@Vacant0: Done my best to address everything above. Cut down the jargon, corrected some plain-wrong information, added trans-titles, replaced Destructoid. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:14, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Looks good now, promoting. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 23:31, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

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