Talk:Good Good (Ashanti song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:29, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Review coming tomorrow... Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:29, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 23:52, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

studio album The Declaration (2008). It was released as the album's second single. → To avoid clipped, short sentences, please say: "studio album The Declaration (2008), serving as the record's second single.

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

best track from the album → please say The Declaration to clarify which album you're talking about

I do not believe that is necessary as the article, particularly the lead, does not make any reference to other albums so there is no reason for confusion. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

It peaked at number 30 → say "The song..." to avoid repetition

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

The video was praised by critics → Rather than having a short sentence which breaks the sentence's flow, please remove it and say something like " A well-received music video, directed by..."

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Ashanti also promoted → Say "The singer" to avoid repetition

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Where exactly are the labels cited?

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Background and composition

was recorded by John Horesco IV.[1] It samples Elton John's 1974 → was recorded by John Horesco IV,[1] and samples Elton John's 1974 (to avoid clipped sentences)

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

In 2008, it was the second single → In 2008, "Good Good" served as the second single

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Kehlani re-used the concept → say "American singe Kehlani..." for further context

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Ashanti sings about her lover through the lyrics → you're repeating yourself with "Ashanti"; please re-write this sentence

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Ashanti's mother and manager → The singer's... (repetition)

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

cited it as the strongest tracks → should be singular

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Start the sentence about the chart with "Commercially,..." and incorporate it in the first para; it just looks super weird having a one-line para

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Music video and promotion

the single.[5] It features Nelly as → the single,[5] featuring Nelly as (short sentences)

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Everything else looks good ;)

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

Flawless ;)

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

I've fixed things here by myself

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Other stuff

Copy-violation

20.6% is a very good score!

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
No dead links! Good job!

Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Outcome

On hold for 7 days! Good job with this! Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:50, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review. I believe that I have addressed everything. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Gladly passing this nomination and congratulating you on your new GA! I wondered if you mabye have time to look over one of my GANs? (There's many to choose from and I'm waiting for months...) However, I do not want to interfer with your schedule, so please do this only if you have time. In any case, congrats again! Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:26, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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