Talk:George Daniel/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Launchballer (talk · contribs) 08:50, 11 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: CatchMe (talk · contribs) 14:08, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

I will hopefully start reviewing this in a few hours. CatchMe (talk · contribs) 14:08, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Well-written

• I think electronic could be linked in the lead.

Linked.

• "as a member of pop band" - "as a member of the pop band" per WP:FALSETITLE.

Added.

• "with the band's Matty Healy" - "with the band's leader Matty Healy"/"with the band's lead vocalist Matty Healy"?

Added 'vocalist' since 'lead' isn't spelt out in the article.

• "made him the co-recipient of multiple awards and nominations including two Ivor Novello Awards including Songwriter of the Year and four Brit Awards." - add a comma between "nominations" and "including". And the latter word is twice here, try replacing one or just removing "including Songwriter of the Year".

Added and trimmed.

• "and co-produced Beabadoobee and PinkPantheress's co-production" - I would remove "co-production" and perhaps add "song" to avoid repetition.

Replaced.

• "was born in Brussels, Belgium and grew up in Seattle, Washington, U.S.." - add a comma after Belgium per MOS:GEOCOMMA and replace "U.S." with "US" per MOS:US, since Daniel is British.

Added.

• "At the time, the band were an emo band" - try to avoid repeating "band". "At the time, it was an emo band" or "At the time, the band made emo music under the name.."? Additionally, I think emo can be linked.

Changed.

• "introduced him to works by the likes of" - just "introduced him to the works of"?

Changed.

• I'm not sure "1975" could be used alone without "the".

Changed to "the band's".

• The first mention of extended plays could be linked too.

Added.

• I'm also not sure if the album titles could be shortened like that. Perhaps "The second and third albums" could work.

They can if the abbreviation's sourced per MOS:ABBRTITLE; as I'm in no mood to rummage, reworded.

No worries. Thanks for the clarification.

• The third mention of the Ivor Novello is linked; the first should be.

Switched.

• The first mention of the Japanese House should be linked.

Added.

• "ended their tour early" could be "ended it early" to avoid a third "tour" mention in the sentence.

Added.

• "lockdown" could be linked to COVID-19 lockdowns since it's not the same as the pandemic.

Added.

• "The band's fifth album was delayed by the band" - The first "The band's" could be replaced with "The 1975's", since it's starting a new paragraph and, again, to avoid repetition with the latter "band".

Changed.

• "Dance" in "second dance track cowritten..." could link to Dance music.

Added.

• "the track's vocalist" - "its vocalist".

Changed but moved it to before "Tove". I think a two word clause disrupts the flow of the sentence.

• "a combination of ambient music and techno" - "which combined ambient music and techno" would work better imo.

Changed.

• Consider splitting the sentence s starting with "In 2015, after Healy met". It's overly long.

Split.

• Sometimes there is "s's" and others only "s'". I think it should be consistent.

Changed to the former per MOS:'S.

• First mention of Coupdekat in body should be linked.

Added.

• "he produced her "Hot Girl"" - add "single"?

Added.

• I think went viral could be linked.

Linked "viral" to "viral video". I think this is a more appropriate link. I believe I've addressed all your concerns, feel free to ping if anything else needs being done.--Launchballer 03:04, 9 January 2025 (UTC)

Verifiable

• Earwig's Copyvio shows Violation unlikely with the highest similarity at 18.7%. Looks great!
• Spot-check (with numbers as of this revision).
  • Ref 3 verifies that he was inspired by Fleetwood Mac (use 1), he took music technology and left school at 16 (use 2), and used demos of the band as coursework (use 3). Y
  • Ref 5 verifies that he replaced Healy on drums. Y
  • Ref 9 verifies that labels were not interested and that they signed for 20 pounds. Y
  • Ref 11 verifies the chart-topping positions. Y
  • Ref 14 verifies the British AOTY win. Y
  • Ref 19 verifies they won Band of the Year (first use) and he and Charli were first photographed there (second use). I would replace "He met" with "He was first photographed with".

Changed to "At the 2019 GQ Awards, he was photographed with Charli XCX". I'll do the rest when I get back.--Launchballer 15:35, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

• • Ref 22 verifies that he broke his shoulder and was replaced. Y
  • Ref 34 verifies the single release month and that it is a dance track co-written by Tove Lo and TimFromTheHouse. Y
  • Ref 35 verifies Tove Lo provided vocals. Y
  • Ref 43 verifies Daniel co-produced the Japanese House's 2016 EP. Y

Broad

• It is broad, without going into unnecessary detail.

Neutral

• It is neutral, for sure.

Stable

• It is stable; no edit wars recently.

Illustrated

• It is illustrated by two images; they are properly licensed on Commons.

Final comments

I think that's all. Great work on this article, @Launchballer: I will put this  On hold until some issues are resolved or discussed. CatchMe (talk · contribs) 15:30, 8 January 2025 (UTC)

After all the comments were addressed, I took a final look to the article and will ✓ Pass this nomination. Congrats for your work!! CatchMe (talk · contribs) 03:35, 9 January 2025 (UTC)

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