Talk:Extrasolar planets in fiction/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: TompaDompa (talk · contribs) 00:39, 21 July 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 06:37, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Your prose style leads to larger, denser paragraphs that occasionally get very clumpy and need to be broken up. A couple of paragraph breaks are the biggest thing you need. As always, amply cited with great SF refs. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:08, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

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Copy changes

There are some long paragraphs in some of the sections, and reading may be aided by introducing paragraph breaks.

I mean, the longest paragraph (in the "In multiple star systems" section) is 440 words. That's a relatively lengthy paragraph, but by no means is it unreadably long. If I thought there were good/natural places to split the longest paragraphs I might do that, but as it stands I would kind of have to rewrite them a fair bit for the end result not to be rather awkward. TompaDompa (talk) 10:24, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

Lead

• Most of these fictional planets do not differ significantly from the Earth, and serve only as settings for the narrative. Remove unneeded comma (WP:CINS)
  • Done. TompaDompa (talk) 10:24, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

In multiple star systems

• Isaac Asimov's 1941 short story "Nightfall" portrays a planet which is in constant daylight from at least one of its six suns for millennia at a time before a single night of true darkness, which is a much-anticipated event, the 1963 The Twilight Zone episode "On Thursday We Leave for Home" depicts a planet that is challenging for humans to inhabit due to the unending heat and light from a pair of suns, and Mark Hodder's 2012 novel A Red Sun Also Rises is set on a planet where a dim red sun rises at the same time as the planet's twin white suns set. The first list entry has a comma, so the other commas should be semicolons.
  • Done. TompaDompa (talk) 10:24, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• I want a break somewhere here but am not sure where to put it.
  • As noted above, I don't think there is really a good place to split the paragraph. TompaDompa (talk) 10:24, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

Rogue planets

• Earth is threatened by impact with a rogue planet in the 1933 novel When Worlds Collide by Edwin Balmer and Philip Wylie and its 1951 film adaptation, and becomes a rogue planet itself in Fritz Leiber's 1951 short story "A Pail of Air". Remove comma CinS
  • Added "it" after "and" instead. TompaDompa (talk) 10:24, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

Physical environment

• Consider splitting this paragraph at At the other end of the spectrum
  • I don't think that's a good idea. That sentence follows directly from the preceding one. TompaDompa (talk) 10:24, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

Sourcing and spot checks

Reviewed: 6, 9, 22, 25, 30

No issues.

Images

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